Solid Red

A senryu

 

My blood fills the cracks

In the pavement leaving me

No concrete feelings.

Reviews

[Lyn Anderson]

Again, a simple yet powerful piece. This is where you shine very bright, in my opinion.

[DIVYA]

So stark...Awesome word choice!

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you so much.

[Rita L. Sev]

This is a thoughtful piece that packs a punch - excellent metaphor, Dale!

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank again Rita :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i picture a really cold day in the city..maybe my old NY...
nice analogy, Dale.

jacob

[Green]

I've always admired people who could write things like this (senryus that is); the ability to say such powerful things in such few words is truly a talent. I especially like the play on words (well, I guess that's what it is, I'm not really sure what the right word to use is) with "concrete feelings" at the end. It really helped tie everything up together and bring it to a close.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Why thank you so much for such an in-depth review, play on words is the correct term, yes I enjoy doing these, it is a fun challenge.

[Lost in Wonderland]

I liked this-- simple, but very direct and purposeful language.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you very much.