Window Pain

 

Despite the glare

Of the sunrays

Shining through

The stained glass

I can still see

What keeps

The window

In its place.

Reviews

[barleygirl]

Nicely suggestive . . . like an open vessel awaiting each reader's unique interpretation. Also nicely visual in so few words.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you so much BarleyClause

[barleygirl]

That's a good one . . . I'll post it under my name! *wink! wink!*

[Dust That Drifts Throug..]

Nice short poem. I like the play on words too.

[Lyn Anderson]

The pain of looking out the window. A wonderful play on words, and well done.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Why thank you kindly.

[mattavelli]

Oh pun that window.
Hello, Dale! :)
This is a witty write, fun!

[Corset]

The Pain, pane, wonderful play on words R&R, excellent actually :)

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you sweetie:)))

[Vria P Crow]

FIRST IMPRESSIONS

The wordplay with "Window Pain" encouraged me to read this delightful little piece.

CONTENT AND FORMAT

Windows are often used to observe our surroundings without venturing there. The word "pain" is kept at bay. The question I ask: Is the window keeping out the "pain" or confining it where the speaker resides? It appears that the stained glass is not for looking outside. This is where I imagined a church; a safe place. Perhaps, the speaker is hiding from external sources of what troubles him. The inner demons appear to remain outside when the windows offer protection.

Concise formatting is always appreciated. The larger font made it pleasant to read, setting the mood for the writing.

CLOSING THOUGHTS

Overall, I was enthralled with the philosophical questions the writer evoked. Thank you for sharing!

sincerely,
ria

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Why thank you so much for that in-depth review. Much appreciated.

[Vria P Crow]

You are quite welcome! I will be browsing and adding your work to my never ending reading list. :)

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

I appreciate that... I am in the process of moving so am not on a lot right now, but once I am settled I will be on more.

[Vria P Crow]

Not a problem. You will have just many delightful treats (reviews) when you are settled in. I wish you luck on the move. It can be stressful but rewarding when you are done.

[Ana Papaya]

Pain keeps things in their place, no room for movement or growth. Like being stuck in a rut, observing beauty but not touching it.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you for that profound thought my friend.

[Ana Papaya]

Always a pleasure.

[Erotic Goddess]

Hey love, very vivid images. One suggestion would be to change to "sun's rays" at the end of the second line to make it more visual for the reader, but this was beautiful and the color imagined at the stained glass...left me feeling the color washing through the light. Love it.

xxoxx

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you my one and only Goddess. So glad to see you on my page again.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

love the title...yes, the sun shines through but the pain of the glass keeps it from warming the heart.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you sir for sharing your thoughts on my work.