Letting Go Of A Couple Senryus

 

Window Pane

 

Just tap the window

If you want to break the glass

The pain is holding.

 

 

Demon’s Nightmare

 

You just need to taunt

The demons while you’re asleep,

Then you live the dream.

Reviews

[Patricia]

Are you in my head again! Well done my friend. As always it is a pleasure to read your poems. I wish I had a talent for writing big feelings in just a few words. very well done

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you so very much... you have the talent for it, you just have to dig deep.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

both of these say so much...
especially like the last line of the first one, "the pain is holding"
and so much of it has made that glass so fragile...and the heart is transparent.

and the second, in our dreams we fight the demons better than when we are awake...maybe we have a bit more courage in our dreams...
j.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you Jacob... there is strength in our dreams cause that where we can do anything.

[Chris Shaw]

Hello Dale. Your first senryu is a clever play on words. Window pane indeed. Your Demon's Nightmare, I'm thinking, how would you do that? I certainly like the idea of altering the outcome of nightmares. Enjoyed both of these. Thank you.

Chris

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you so much. Appreciate the feedback.