Cryptic Message

  

A fog covered dream

Of an angel bathing

In brimstone fire.

The charcoal waterfall

Offers no solution.

 

The devil watches

In wild eyed amazement

While he whispers

In my ear,

 

“Shhh…Do not tell the wizard

of that you so desire

or your requiem

will be out of tune”

 

Cryptic is his words

But deep in my soul  

I know…

 

I know therefore I fear!!!

 

Reviews

[alternative_be]

I like your very surprising use of imagenary. At first I get this very angelic, mystifying visualisation full of light ... soon to be juxtaposed by a very black vision. Reading this evokes a sense of duality. The duality of daily life, the duality of black and white, between which we are torn during the whole of our lifespan.
Like you are you writing: you know, therefore you fear...
Life can be frightening at times, that makes it so challenging and adventurous ...
I wish I could tell you to have no fear, because fear often gives you not the best of advice.
Sometimes we have to take risks in order to proceed ...
Please keep us surprising with this kind of mystifying cryptic words!

[Angelic Darkness]

These stanzas: A fog covered dream

Of an angel bathing

In brimstone fire.

The charcoal waterfall

Offers no solution.



The devil watches

In wild eyed amazement

While he whispers

In my ear,

These are the better of the rest, and speak together as a whole.

AD

[Gandré]

your latest challenge to the separation of the sensual world of wishful thinking and anxiety like..."if the future really looks bright for you" ... is here noticeable....I liked the dialogue-play and how you graphically put emphasis on the speech of the devil, the allegory of being caucious...there is always something what can happen. Wonderfully creativelly painted this one. Kudos! loved it!

[Anima Inspired]

Certainly...cryptic. Still, I enjoy a piece where I can try to decipher hidden meanings. I like the section where she "whispers in the poet's ear".

Cryptic is his words (maybe "are" instead of "is"?)
But deep in my soul
I know�


Bravo!

[Windy]

sorry my friend this one is over my head. I've read it several times and still am not sure what it's saying, mabye I'm just not seeing it. It seems "dark" to me but other than that I don't know what to say.....

[MistyJRose]

I like it, kind of brings a fantasy novel idea to mind. I loved the how you bolded the narrators parts, then unbolded the voice's. that was a nice touch. Thanks for sending me a read request. i loved it

[Mysty Rayn]

Love this... I just don't know what to say. There is so much that is great. The words, the images, it's unique status. I just love it.

[.::Cup^E^Cake*RaWr!*::.]

Wow this is such a great piece!
Very well writen!
Great Write!!

[John Stussy]

That was quite a read, I thoroughly enjoyed it. I think you picked the perfect title for this one Cowboy, now I'll be sitting here re-reading it trying to understand it on every level.

[emmajoy]

Cryptic, yes? Different, certainly. Interesting format...

'A fog covered dream
Of an angel bathing
In brimstone fire.
The charcoal waterfall
Offers no solution.'

words with a great ring to them, chiming out a clear picture - i thi-i-ink.

Thank you for sharing yet another unusual piece of writing.



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