Cryptic Message

  

A fog covered dream

Of an angel bathing

In brimstone fire.

The charcoal waterfall

Offers no solution.

 

The devil watches

In wild eyed amazement

While he whispers

In my ear,

 

“Shhh…Do not tell the wizard

of that you so desire

or your requiem

will be out of tune”

 

Cryptic is his words

But deep in my soul  

I know…

 

I know therefore I fear!!!

 

Reviews

[alternative_be]

I like your very surprising use of imagenary. At first I get this very angelic, mystifying visualisation full of light ... soon to be juxtaposed by a very black vision. Reading this evokes a sense of duality. The duality of daily life, the duality of black and white, between which we are torn during the whole of our lifespan.
Like you are you writing: you know, therefore you fear...
Life can be frightening at times, that makes it so challenging and adventurous ...
I wish I could tell you to have no fear, because fear often gives you not the best of advice.
Sometimes we have to take risks in order to proceed ...
Please keep us surprising with this kind of mystifying cryptic words!

[Larissa G.]

It makes one begin to think and ponder many things. It is indeed intriguing, and different from normal.
I thought near the end the change of length disrupted the flow a little bit, but all that needs is a slight tune-up.
Keep writing. :)

[T]

Oh it gave me chills! I want to know what he whispered but then again I don't! lol OK, I got goosebumps now ... Wonderfully written ... chilling, eerie yet intriguing ... hugs

[Lori]

This is very different from much of your other work. It's also very intriguing and...well....trippy. "~)

[Emily B]

Not what I expected . . . but, oh, so much deeper and stronger and intriguing than I deserved.