The Devil's Deja Vu

Inspired by the song "Falling Into You" by Sebastian Bach

  

Twisting my mind

Till thoughts in my head

Become so distorted

That right and wrong

Collide like Armageddon.

 

Peeling away my soul

Layer by layer

So that I feel so shallow

I can’t even recognize

My reflection in the water.

 

Gripping my heart

So tight that all feelings

Seep onto the floor

Into the porthole of hell

Burning like a Holy sacrifice.

 

Once again I am caught

In the devil’s déjà vu

Confirming my legacy.

 

Reviews

[Bethany Woody]

The Devvil made me do it, :)! Seriously, it's an interesting piece and I think we can all relate a bit. There are times when we feel like we have all been down this road before, yet we still don't know what choices we should make. It can all be so very frustrating and confusing and maddening. You are very descriptive in this piece and it makes it easy for me to envision the words as little scenes in my mind. Thanks for the great write.

Mona Lisa

[Relic]

Never saw this one. Kinda scary and I can see your head was in a bad place. I walked behind Sabastian at a kiss concert. His girlfriend was hot. haha, Good poem Dale and deep.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you sir.

[Relic]

My pleasure.

[KAOlmsted]

You do this type of write so well, Dale. The imagery always blows me away. I love that you're featuring things from back before I knew you...gives me a chance to really sink my teeth into your history as a writer. Well done, and thank you for reposting this.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

I like to refeature for my newer friends and I,love to revisit my old works to see where I have been... so glad you like it.

[KAOlmsted]

strålande ;-) (I wonder how soon that will get old *laugh*)

[KAOlmsted]

Swedish never gets old...sillykimmer ;-)

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Yes you are :)

[anne p. murray- LadeeAn..]

Well written poem. A place I don't want to be...the devil's lair...not for this maiden fair. You're tooo sweet for his den of death

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Ahhh why thank you young lady... but the devil comes in many forms and sometimes we do not see it till it is too late.

[anne p. murray- LadeeAnne]

I only know that all too well. But we gotta fight the battle, Cuz' my dad can beat his dad. My dad is God ;) So is yours

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Oh yes we must always battle on... as long as one heart still believes hope is never really gone.

[anne p. murray- LadeeAnne]

You've got that one right! I like your pic in your santa hat

[Muse]

Halloween is over I thought? lol..who am I to talk. Wicked...I love it when you write wicked!

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Halloween is over but the mood is not :) Thank you.

[Cherrie Palmer]

nice use of imagery, great use of ryhme, and a very clever close

[Fran Marie]

Once again I am caught
In the devil’s déjà vu
Confirming my legacy.

That ole devil is so relentless ..still trying to work his evil doings in man's life ...it's very easy to get caught up in it~well done

[Liza]

this poem reeks of religion :)
guilt and fear
its a beautiful creation
i enjoyed reading it

[laceyjane23]

This is a great piece, you came up with some very creative lines. Good luck in my contest.
Laceyjane

[Dean]

Great imagery and great thoughts!

-Dean.

[Angelic Darkness]

This is a great poem, but I can also feel your sadness here. Your words
wrap around each other, pulling in, a sacrificial testiment of your emotions.
The flow is very good, and they reflect dark, torrid images. AD