Wicked Sensation

Some temptations are undeniable.

 

As I watched her saunter

towards me with my wanton eyes

those sultry hips swing like a pendulum

that put me under a spell

convincing me that I was hungry

like a wolf stalking the night.

Though she was the prey

I felt like the victim of original sin

and I would pay any price

to feel the punishment.

I could taste her lips when I licked mine

even though we never kissed,

turning this craving into a ring of fire.

By the time she caged me inside her shadow

I was paralyzed by a fear

that had me floating on cloud nine.

Trembling, not of fright,

rather an uninhibited desire.

As her voluptuous frame captured my body

I felt her fingers claw my back

deep enough to penetrate my heart;

that became the climax of my soul’s destiny.

When she buried my remains

thirteen feet deep

my spirit descended with the purpose

of shaking hands with the devil

and thanking him for giving me

a purpose for dying without remorse.

 

Reviews

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

I see this poem as a very well-written little story, full of vivid perceptions and clever metaphors. All of your descriptive sentences were flawlessly put together. Nice work.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you very much.

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goes Cascading!)]

much welcome :)

[closed account]

ok, pure and utter orgasmic desires from sanctioned endeavors!!... SEXAY

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank ya Gizmo!!

[DIVYA]

100/100 This is great. A 'man' poem - Passion from a man's view point superbly expressed!

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you so much sweets.

[DIVYA]

:)

[Renée]

How did I miss this one when I was digging in your attic ?! Wow this has wicked heat and done with class ! Woot Woot !

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you very much *fist bump*

[Renée]

"fist bump" with a back hand slap ( ;

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Ouch!!! Not so hard.

[Renée]

oh...that came out wrong ! lol low five backward ? q ;

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Yeah right, you wanted to hurt me :)

[Renée]

yeah thats me growlllll q ;

[Frieda P]

Holy! This is climatic...wow, just wow Dale. I felt this one. It's teasing, erotic and off the charts good! Love it, goes right into favorites.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you so very much... how honored and pleased I am by your reaction.

[Frieda P]

I always knew you were a wolf in sheep's clothing. ;-)

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Or am I a Sheep in wolves clothing?

[Frieda P]

Ha did you think this was therapy? Look up John for that.....

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Oh I am beyond therapy :)

[Frieda P]

me too, no problemo!

[ChaoticSoul]

Love this. It's just the right amount of sexy and classy. And the descriptions you use create such a fantastic array of imagery. Really enjoyed reading this!

[Lily Mae]

"became the climax of my soul’s destiny." This is phenomenal.. A favorite of mine for sure..xo

[Tina Kline]

Some things are worth dying for, go out with a smile. Very erotic and full of temptation...perhaps a fantasy to come true.

I like the way you play sober, and honest with the female "wolf-almost"
Your friendly skills are sometimes so keen we should apploud them. You have the gift of being tender, and watching a woman, not too greedy as some are.
As you write litteraly "to penitrate my heart " it is a good metaphor.
The soul's destiny is a second question dear Dale. :D
but what a lovely lovely write.

To give so deeply and feeling the purpose for dying without remorse...
I totally loved it! thanks for sharing my good friend X

[Priscilla Sayers]

Well it has gotten rather hot in here...
That was such a passionate piece that I can feel it through the screen as it sends that yearning into one's heart to have someone to speak so uninhibited to another.
I love it!