The Valley Of Fear

The Valley Of Fear

A Poem by Katherine S.
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This is in a two persons point of view...

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The moon was a deep shade of red.
Just like your lover's blood.

We laid in the free, green grass.
Being watched like prey.

We looked up at the dark, ample sky.
And she watches down on you.

A shooting star flies, making its way.
The fire won't always burn in your favor.

There's a cackle, it looms in the dark.
We're closer to the end than you'd ever imagine.

The dark engulfs the plains.
As it engulfs your heart.

There wasn't a thing in sight.
Only the feeling of hollow delight.

The cackle grows stronger, comes nearer.
My hands will press against his neck.

The gasps escape from your mouth.
Say goodbye to your young lover.

I can't move, I can't shake a limb.
You can't leave the valley of fear.

The dark starts to fade, but no trace of you.
You didn't say your goodbyes.

You've been taken from me, I'm alone again...
Isn't this what you feared all along, dear?


© 2013 Katherine S.



Author's Note

Katherine S.
Don't ask where this came from, because I honestly don't know... I just stared writing, and this happened..

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this is really creative
and it was really good too

Posted 2 Years Ago


Reminded me of something old (i grew up in the 80's)

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=vgjKaggAaoM

Posted 3 Years Ago


Very creative...I enjoyed every word.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Katherine S.

3 Years Ago

Thanks. :)
It's okay to just start writing and let it happen! I too write this way with rarely a final plan of what I want to write. It's part of being creative - just letting the words form together to finish a piece.
I like this, and the way you have the two conversations - like the alter ego talking!


Posted 3 Years Ago


Katherine S.

3 Years Ago

Thank you! :)
well I will be honest with you as I have been with all others. since it is a review, so it needs to cover everything. the title was perfect as many things are judged by cover, poems fisrt are judged by the title. it made me at least to have a look at the content. the poem was more like a story, or better to say, a memory which is remomerated by the addresse. the scene was quite vivid and real, the words served great deal to the content, these are all very positive and outstanding points to be present in any writing. now to the weak points. I bet the rhyme was free verse, what I mean it was not written in stanzas or quarters, but you kind of formed the lined in couplets which is not a style I may be aware or heard of. writing free verse is different as you are free to line words how who want, but in verse and couplets, you need a rhyme which in this one is not present. the last thing is the theme; it is about love, aftermaths, effects, you used a variety of descriptions and imageries to present it which s good, but I still believe it wants more powerful imageries, falling star 's been used many times, I prefered a diffrent image, but finally you are the writer, and you are free. thank you and best luck.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Katherine S.

3 Years Ago

Thank you for the review. I'll keep that in mind for future writings.
Baban.A.A

3 Years Ago

most welcome, best wishes...!
I really like this. Awesome work. I Like how it starts off calm and the intensity builds up. Dark and creepy. Good job.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Katherine S.

3 Years Ago

Thank you. :)
This was very elegant in it's description. I like the offset colors for emphasis. Lovely, thank you for sharing!

Posted 4 Years Ago


Katherine S.

4 Years Ago

Thanks so much! :)
Wow that was profound! Beautifully done Katie:)

Posted 4 Years Ago


Katherine S.

4 Years Ago

Thank you. :)
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4 Years Ago

Your very welcome my new friend!
Delight is often fused with danger. I enjoyed the duality within this poem.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Katherine S.

4 Years Ago

Thank you. :)
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Mia
I see it’s a hit but I’m not so much a fan of dark writing, unless the darkness is there for a reason…I’m not sure how to explain it! Nothing at all wrong with your writings but truth be told, it’s not really my cup of tea

Posted 4 Years Ago


Katherine S.

4 Years Ago

We all have different preferences. Thanks for the review. :)

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Added on May 21, 2013
Last Updated on May 21, 2013
Tags: dark, evil, eerie, scary, creepy, weird

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Katherine S.
Katherine S.

Pittsburgh, PA



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