AED

a kiss may cloud my memory
but willingly I take a sip
the drink goes straight to my heart
slows down the pulse
I can't feel it now
please beat, baby, beat
I keep trying to feel
(complete)
or anything at all
you leave me lacking,
a real pity
oh love, leave me paralyzed
love, leave me hypnotized
love, just don't leave me now

Author's Note

automated external defibrillator... meh.

Reviews

[deadlife]

it is nice...very nice....
and I love the passion...brilliant.
...hold love tightly.

-rupam

[A.M. Nelson]

yeah 'meh'. Cliche driven and rather banal write.

please beat, baby, beat
I keep trying to feel
complete
- perhaps the worst bit.
Language here belongs to crappy pop tune...not to 'poetry'.

[Girl, Interrupted]

eeeeeeeeh. i did really like this part though:
oh love, leave me paralyzed
love, leave me hypnotized
love, just don't leave me now

[Zac G.]

I like the image that you are painting, the words you used to start the poem very descriptive got me interested right away not just another love sick poem but a call to love, a need for love. I like the peom as a whole nice and easy to read and understand and I didn't get half was and lose interest, good job.