plain talk and naked truths

plain talk and naked truths

A Poem by deathcabxcutiex
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factualism and other isms

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I used to be the back porch poet
with a book of rhymes
now, I'm just a fortune cookie
full of cheap advice
I say
down with the old me,
talk is the same cheap
it's always been
but I'm out to find
how boring I really am
I show more
than I hide
care more than I can cry
give my love from the
inside out
lose patience quickly
but disguise it well
skin has gotten thicker
cynical all the same
my wires are live
I'm in crisscross
and I feel fine
I have a sin
for every second hand tick
there before the grace of God, go I


© 2008 deathcabxcutiex



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Well written & feels genuine. Loved the first line.
:)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

flow is lovely, dah'ling. i enjoyed it.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Great lines, wonderfully written. Nicely done.




Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Nice write, 'I show more, than I hide, care more than I can cry'
Really liked that and liked this piece

J.P.O.et

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

"I used to be the back porch poet
with a book of rhymes
now, I'm just a fortune cookie
full of cheap advice"

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I like this, its unique and it can have many meanings.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I can really identify with that. I liked it! Maybe consider putting same cheap thing, or same cheap something instead of just letting that hang. It's not a big deal, but it might help the flow just a bit.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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