Let Me Be Her

Let me be her

 

The one you hold

 

In the middle of the night

 

When the lights go out

 

The mood becomes so right

 

By a flickering candlelight

 

Let it be me

 

The one to share the moon with you

 

Let me be her

 

The one you wake up to

 

In the early morning sunshine

 

The one who can put a smile on your face

 

Let me be the one

 

You come home to

 

Each and every night

 

I love you so much

 

Let me be her

 

Give me a chance

 

To show you romance

 

It won't cost you a dime

 

Just a bit of your time

 

Let me be her

 

The one who dries your tears

 

Comfort you when you are afraid

 

Let me be the one

 

To stand by your side throughout the years

 

Let me be her

 

The one you dream about

 

Reviews

[Charles D. Moorer]

I have been in this situation before and it aint pretty. You have captured the essence of longing and wanting to be the one, nicel done.

[deeps]

This is a real beautiful write here

[Sean M. Addams]

very beautiful and elegant piece ... loved the imagery in this overall a very good write.... fav lines...In the middle of the night



When the lights go out



The mood becomes so right



By a flickering candlelight

[Ellen Hammond]

This has such a nice flow and a neat shape. Very enjoyable to read.

[lindsay]

This was really beautiful. I sorta pictured this as an acoustic song for some reason. It flowed nicely and like how sometimes it rhymed and other times it didn't. Great Job!

[bluessadmood]

Oh that was so nice..let me be her
The one to hold at night,to share the moon with you
to show you romance..wont cost you a dime
the one who dries your tears
the one who stand by you
through the years
I really enjoyed those lines..how softly flowing ,full of love
lovely write..

[Kaylee Andurs]

I'd want more than a just a bit of his time! ; )
Your poem is very good. Just one suggestion:
to one share the moon with you (I think you have an extra word here.)