Russian Roulette Kiss

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Our kiss seems so harmless

But with each kiss it could be our last

Cause that kiss will kill me

Our love is so dangerous

Every kiss is like russain roulette

So don't stop dreaming

Our love will be short

And soon the end will appear as we are together

Bang

As I float up our lips seperate

My hand lets go of yours

I'm not there to hold you no longer

As I told you before

I played russian roulette with each passing kiss

Now our love is gone

And over

I say good bye

As you cry

Reviews

[Joiedevivre]

good metaphor for kisses, they are a bit of a russian roulette as they spin our feelings around, before pulling the trigger. Nice!

[Rachael Day]

I really enjoyed reading this and i love the title!! You're a really great writer so keep at it. :)

[Muse]

You are a freestyle writer. Very persuasive and disciplined in your delivery here. The title is catchy. The message is clear. Life, love, and happiness can be over as quickly as the game of russain roulette.

[Kelsey]

I agree with the others, this is great work! I reeeaaally enjoyed reading this and I am very impressed with the imagery in it. Love it!

[halflives]

Wow. This was an amazing comparison. I love the way to put two completely different things together and make them work. It's very well written, and I love every line. Great job!

[Jessica Faith]

I love how you realated your love to Russian Roulette. You are really good at writing, and are very talented.

[Aifey Jayd]

This is beautiful but sad. I love how you express your emotions into this piece. I love reading your work. It's so heartfelt and wonderful.

[Ashley]

I think it would help if you word this better, like at the start be like Shiny gun awaits my head. or at the end be like Are love died after i said good bye watching you cry. just a little tweaking here and there.

[Bianca La Salle]

i have no words for this one, other then bravo