Reflection #2

Strewn
Across
The field.

Tossed
By
Lazy hands.

Left
To
Be unloved.

Hurt
To
Sting forever.

Author's Note

XXX 1/1/13

Reviews

[Fabian G. Franklin]

This sounds like the last words of an unwanted stuffed animal...(smile) I couldn't help but notice your "featured review". I worry about reviewers who are too lazy to use proper English but revert to texting abbreviations and leave misspelled words in their review such as "streatch" for (stretch). I will tell you as a matter of fact that rhyme (good rhyme) is a very difficult and much maligned art form. Poetry need not be rhyme nor does it by necessity require alliteration. Poetry does require feeling and passion. It's obvious you have a passion for writing. Now find something you feel strongly about to write about and the end result will most likely be poetry. Every prayer from the heart is a poem but not every poem is a prayer.

[Phillitup]

Thank you very much! Yes, it is disturbing and I tend to ignore something from it if they give me spelling or grammatical advice. Thanks a million!

[David the writer]

This was really short. Which is okay because you can't streatch art, but you don't want to rush it either. First of all, this flowed awkard. Next time, try a rhyming scheme or a syllable pattern. Next, this has an emotion that's clear to see, but it's awkard when you don't feel it. Sorry this happened, for real, BUT it I don't feel bad because this poem made me, I feel bad because I've been through this. Finally, I've read other poems, and I walk away with the same expirence saying "That could have been better.". And btw I'm sorry to be harsh like this, but it's neccessary for you to grow to be a better writer

[Phillitup]

I agree. One needs to grow as an artist of words. Thank you for your opinions. I will revisit this poem.

[David the writer]

Np, as a member of the community I really should reveiw more. So this helps me out a bit too. AND it's always great to help another artist grow