Chain Verse Poem

Just screwing around

I chased you with a lawnmower
The mower of my past
My past is full of diesel fuel
You spilled on the grass
The grass turned some weird a*s color
The color of my pain
My pain is in my a*s right now
God you drive me insane
Is sanity something we all lose
when losers come around
She was round like a meaty Zeppelin
that got to close to the ground
The ground that's covered in diesel fuel
you spilled you little fool
The fool is in a deck of cards
What will I do with you

Reviews

[Frieda P]

Not that familiar with chain verse poetry, your obscure musings here are off the charts and most entertaining Mark.

[Baby Ricochet]

thank you frieda

[s y e]

A quirky write, that's for sure. Made me laugh, nice job, BR

-Noodle.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you Noodleeehead. Love your new photo

[s y e]

Ha, thanks.

[Adri Moolman]

I really enjoyed this great job

[Baby Ricochet]

thank you Adri

[KAOlmsted]

Oh I am so all over chain verse poetry now...I have GOT to try it...It's probably not nearly as easy as you make it look with this piece...really well done! Thanks for sharing this and giving kimmer a spark of inspiration...we'll see if I can pull it off ;-) xoxo

[Baby Ricochet]

You can do it. You got skills

[KAOlmsted]

;-) Backatcha, Baby...

[Emerald Seas]

A quirky write, that's for sure. Just strike a match and torch that lawn. The spectacle will be entertaining enough, too. :)

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you Serah

[Zelle]

this is amazing! I enjoyed how the verse proceeded and how it managed to come back, like it took a complete circle.. thank u for sharing! :)

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you Zelle

[Mother Maggie]

Brilliant, creative and disturbing at the same time--I love it. I've run across a few individuals that might have inspired me to want to run over them with a riding lawnmower myself--not that I ever would.

Blessed Be and keep the creativity flowing

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you Maggie

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Highly creative and cleverly written, well done.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you Thomas

[unsavable_soul]

I liked this,
Creative for sure. I think I might have to try this chain piece thing. It has a good flow to it almost like a blues song with a stop and flow style guitar, at least to me it did as I read it. You did a great job in your ending with pulling the beginning back into it with out keeping the chain from circling, very nice. I will say though I felt with the fun and flowing nature of the piece the ending might at that point circle around to it's beginning more directly. Just a thought and I have never wrote like this intentionally at least, that said I have no idea if there is a direct method or if it is more add lib. Any way another fun and well written piece my friend.
Sincerely
Christopher
100/100

[Baby Ricochet]

thank you chris

[unsavable_soul]

Of course Ric,
You don't mind the nickname do you?
Chris

[Eileenws]

This is very funny. I hope you relieve the pain in your a*s.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you Eileenws