Kiss Me

Kiss Me

 

Desolate throughout

With the solemn walls shaking.

Crumbling is the roof,

And the back door

Breaking.

 

A lonely metal of gray’s,

Crafted as an extension source.

Thinking of the ways to torment

The mind and the soul

To grant such a course.

 

The most brought up;

The ultimate of pains.

To leave this shell

With a hole inside the heart

And nothing to gain.

 

Reviews

[Katie Smith]

The last stanza is my favorite. It really speaks to me. you are a very linguistic writer. I hope to meet you someday so you could help me with my writing. Please look at my writing and tell me what I could improve on.

[Zephyr]

the imagery in this is incredible, and the poem in general is well written. you might want to make the font bigger, though (it's legible, but hard to read).

[EliJoLee]

woww.
so detailed and descripted.
loved every word of it.
very well written.
swell work!

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

great use of words, wonderfully penned.


A great write.

[Lydia]

This is really good.
Everything you write is really good.
I like the first stanza a lot.
I like all of it a lot.
:D