Payback

Moving On...from rags to riches.

Collecting dimes and pinching pennies but dimes cant pay what’s due on time

Guess I'm just a dime a dozen and I'm lucky enough to make ends meat

I can speak volumes on hard times and sorrow

Such an enslaved grace…holding me in place…a vice

I make just enough to pay the price…and my heart has bled dry for you

I can no longer give you my time

All I can give is this broke rhyme from my bankrupted mind

Whispers from friends who remind my regrets

knowing I’ll never have the funds to make up this debt

But hope…she became my best friend…a blend of beauty and wishes

One part love and three parts what I've been missing

And I've been missing you…hope

The ice on the ground reminded me today as if a cold dead mirror beneath my feet reflect your face

Such a fitting place

Beneath my feet your voice attempts to chase away my will

But I will not listen…such a poisoned dialect

Your heart is a sea of incarceration, streaming with denial…a glorious nightmare

And I have woken…

The ice from my past where I used to slip I now figure skate with my dreams

With new life I adorn

Like a fresh pillow where new dreams are born…hope…

I needed you like blanket needs a child to keep warm...and the temperature is rising.

Where empty vaults collecting cobwebs once exist

Is a place where hope and happiness are now rich

For this blood hungry bank, she has surely died

I payed back my heartache with an abundance of time

The debts awoke upon history tests, and I know all right answers.

Reviews

[DaniElle LaPointe]

In depth and debt, regret. I only hope she is worse for wear. making ends meet/meat? The struggle here in emotion with the crux of it tied to financial undertones makes for a read that allows me to immerse myself into another's point of view...being a single parent can suck from time to time.

[Katherine S.]

This is very well written, it's worded wonderfully and there's so much emotion put into it. It really makes the reader feel all the emotion you portrayed. Out of all the poems I've read, this one definitely one of the best. :)

[Derek Nall]

Thanks a ton!

[Katherine S.]

You're welcome. :)

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

This is a "stream of conciousness" piece, which I find refreshing in an odd way. It's not worried about form or meter, or adhereing to rules, rather it's just emotion and thought put down on the page. Nice window into your soul, my friend. :)

[Derek Nall]

Thank you very much for reading :) Appreciate the comment.

[emmajoy]

Such a mix of emotions, of past and present.. hurt and hunger, wondering and wandering from one problem to another. There's quite a flow of erratic wording in this, surely coz of such mixed feelings.. of losing hope or wanting what you can't have, need .. and that 'The ice on the ground reminds me today as if a cold mead mirrow beneath my feet reflect your face ~ Such a fitting place' That's graphic, sharp. A varying meter in this is the only negative.. otherwise have read it three times and find it near memorable, so full of life's darkness then .. drawing nearer the light

[Derek Nall]

Yes there are a lot of mixed emotions in this...thanks for the awesome feedback like always!

[Eddie Phillips]

Masterfully written!

[BryanaBear]

I absolutely love this poem, very well written and thought out. Keep up the good work

[Derek Nall]

Thank you very much for reading :)

[BryanaBear]

No problem

[Subrat]

Well Well Derek!!!! As always this is a true masterpiece. The selection of phrases are awesome. "Empty vaults collecting cobwebs once exist". Keep it up Derek.

[Derek Nall]

Thank you!

[Alex Falkner]

Very well written and quite inspiring, thank you for letting a little shine shine through. :)

[Derek Nall]

Thanks for the read and review!

[Male Stokes Jr]

Definitely a nice poem.. I can really relate to it.. I think the details in which you describe things is great.. It's very visual, inspiring and touching...

[Derek Nall]

Thanks a lot man!