Hold You in the Rain

Hold You in the Rain

A Poem by devoe
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A poem about losing someone

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Hold You in the Rain


 

 

 

I

I will

I will call you

my angel.

 



Be still

my love

my tears are falling

with your blood.

 


Hush

don't speak.

Your words silenced

I don't need.

 



Breathe.

My love.

Stop weeping

with the gods.

 



No

your eyes

don't close them.

Here i am

 



to hold you

like this

like this

stay please.

 



The sky

it's pouring.

It's hiding

my pain.

 



Still

I will

I will hold you

in the rain.



 



 

 


© 2012 devoe



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devoe
First shot at poetry

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- oh the loss is palpable - this is a song - the quiet kind of song - the song that's just about murmured - to a pouring rain - the kind of song - that weeps - even when its not being sung - absolutely beautiful - there is a rhythm to this pain - that makes it divine - and the images - that you capture - with such an economy of words - are exquisite -
- i won't comment about the 'first shot' bit - :) - because this one - is beyond all that - :) -

Posted 6 Years Ago


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This so beautiful. I love the imagery with every stanza.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Aw, well written, great imagery....I always feel this way when I lose someone.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is amazing for your first shot. It flows really well, and your choice of words are beautiful. I love the lines, "Your eyes. Don't close them, here I am". Nice work :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

For your first shot at poetry you did a great job, it has a sad feel to you and it flows perfectly together, great work.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

First shot? Love it. I love the line breaks, and the flow it creates.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Hahaha. You're not just smart. You're awesome. FYI getting a review from you is a better achievement :D

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Im your 200 view! I consider that an acomplishment.

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LMAO Graci. I totally got what you said. Thank you thank you thank you

Posted 6 Years Ago


this is not rap. thats all I have to say.

Posted 6 Years Ago


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yknow, this is a good first shot at poetry. the yearning is utterly tangible in its direct simplicity. you use spaces, pauses, like breaths, to form to gather emotion and exhale a poem! lovely write.

Posted 6 Years Ago


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Added on October 31, 2009
Last Updated on April 26, 2012
Tags: Loss, love, blood, rain, dying, death, whisper, weep, tears

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devoe
devoe

Townsville, Australia



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