Watching.

Watching.

A Story by KittyKatgirl

I watched her looking around nervously she knew someone was following her but she couldn't see me. Soon she'll be buried in the ground with the other girls I killed.


© 2015 KittyKatgirl



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KittyKatgirl
Just something for a contest.

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Ohh my.. a good description of a moment in the mind of a killer.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Good stuff. Short and sweet which I assume was the point of the contest.

I would consider changing the last word. Look for something a wee bit more creepy.
You have told us they are buried in the ground so we can assume they are dead - so consider something off centre like - LOVED or DESIRED. I think you need to create a juxtaposition between your character's motives and actions.

I liked it.

Posted 2 Years Ago


KittyKatgirl

2 Years Ago

Thank you so much and yeah I will :)

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