Hiroshima Love Poem

Written from the point of view of a man who lost his love when the bomb dropped. For a contest here on writers cafe.

A shadow
a burn
a silent slow memory
of you and I
who we were
and who we are no longer
my love
my friend

Reiko you were
as pretty as
cherry blossoms falling
and as delicate
as lace

I asked you to
marry me
sitting there
on our favorite bench
under our favorite
tree the one bent
and knarled like a sad
old man
we liked to think
that our love
made him happy again.

Dear friend
tiny love, pretty dancer
painted like a geisha
but loud and laughing
like the sun.

that someone such as you
should burn
is a crime
an ugly irony
i cannot face

I wander through
this wilderness
of gray ash
that is death or life
or the hereafter
or something like it
and I search for nothing but you

Reiko
Reiko
my tiny glowing star.

Written for you on what remains of my heart,
With eternal devotion,  from your Kenji.

Reviews

[Constance]

Beautiful. Thank you so much for doing this. I wish more people would try to imagine...

[Mystica]

S**t son.

I am jealous.

That is amazing.

[S.J.Floreen]

It's very sad, the loss it tells during such a tragic time.

[Lady Lazarus.]

Reiko
Reiko
my tiny glowing star.

is such an incredible incredibly line.....
this poem is such a tragic beauty poem.
it brought tears to my eyes.
You can almost feel them.
great theme and so touching....

[Anima Inspired]

Wonderfully written... The imagery here is wonderful...it brought to life two people and a tragedy, told a story, gave hope, brought tears... Wonderfully written.

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strong use of metaphors and similes that contrast to make a compelling mood. the ups and downs of the piece bring the reader through the tragic setting. great idea and good poem.