Secrets

Secrets

A Poem by dreaming dame
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I decide to help the X-Queen from Poethecrow's series of poems about the world of Sunday.

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The X-King is dead,

X-Queen's lonley.

Hears his plea,

Her heart,

 black to red

from her did part.

 

Away, to his tomb

Her thoughts, consumed

by what-ifs and whys,

His truths; her lies,

She's haunted.

Taunted by her tainted love.


A lonely morning the queen

is visited by four beauties unseen.

Winter's seductive mistress,

the adoring and lovely lady of Spring,

Summer's exciting and curvacious

and Autumn's tranquil beauty.

these four felt it their duty

to tell the queen:

''Love defeats death.''

And left.


The X-Queen's tears

drowned every one of her fears.

All's left is lost love.


But every storm has a rainbow.

Slowly life began to grow.

'Though still our Queen dwelt in sorrow.

'Till one day...

An army approached.

The leader, such a handsome creature.

As distance fled

She stood in shock filled awe.


Stopping his army,

He gallantly stepped down,

smiled and whispered in her ear,

"I have a secret."


Trembling, the X-Queen bowed,

"Your Highness, a secret?"


Eyes twinkling, he smiled,

revealing a tooth golden.

"Indeed, my lady Queen.

I was but a pirate,

until this lovely X-Queen I met,

Stole my heart, caging my freedom."


Her stubborn chin lifted,

Ruby lips pouting,

"A pirate indeed.

That'd be the last we need."

A sigh, defenses fled.

"A thief; after my heart and head."


A question then asked on one knee,

to join him; to reign the sea.

Where their hearts will ever be free,

together and forever for eternity.


The exciting and curvacious Summer,

then rose; as asked by her dear friend,

rose as the new X-Queen.

To rule the land of Sunday,

Where come all what may;

to the land of peace and love,

to live until THE END.


© 2011 dreaming dame



Author's Note

dreaming dame
Okay. I'm finally done! :) And I am pleased with how it turned out. I am happy for any criticism, and thank you for reading. Poe, I truly hope you like your ending. :) If not, go change the ending yourself. :P

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Thanks FF. -.- tsk tsk. Lol, so my endings are a little bloody and unfair. I just think it's so cool that you're writing your own last poem to my series, DD! I'm really liking it so far, but next time I read it I want it to be done! :) So send me a read request when you are. Love you!

Posted 6 Years Ago


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A very nice writing. It always fascinates me when stories are written as poems. Very well done. May i give you an advice: You may like Vikram Seth's poems!

Posted 6 Years Ago


This is wonderful, I love you how you entered the seasons........

Posted 6 Years Ago


Oooo I can honestly same I couldn't have done better:):P Sorry I took soooo long:( Wish I had read it waaay sooner cuz it's awesome:):):) You rock Ochee:):)

Posted 6 Years Ago


It was really great. How you slowly changed the emotion, and not not that she was sad and now happy. I really loved it!!

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Oh, *sniffles* Oh, is so happy. *blows nose loud and long* The X-Queen is can finally be happy. Thank you. *genuine smile* for taking her out of my bloody hands. You best poem! *favorite! favorite!*

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A trult incadecenst look into noble fear, Poe would be proud himself I imagine, well penned, a great read.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I haven't read Poe's series, but this is a great stand alone poem! Lovely rhyming and the plot gave it a fairytale feel and managed to captivate me from the start. This was a wonderful write, please keep going! :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

this is a great peom written amazingly . yep like Honourfish mentioned it does feel more than a story but i like it as a poem cos i like how you have an poem and it could be adapted into a story or have a story but feel it could be adapted into a poem . love it . thanks for requesting it me .

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Magically emotional story :) i feel this is more a story than a poem because it takes you on a journey! I also adore your alliteration and use of english for example 'All's left is lost love' it just slips elegantly off the tongue! great read :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Strong and dark story. I like the short poem. You made me want to read more. Thank you for a amazing poem and story.
Coyote

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Tags: Secrets, king, queen, love, heartache, Sunday, freedom, pirates, beauty

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dreaming dame
dreaming dame

Southern Ontario, Canada



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I'm 18 now, finally the age I dreamed of being as a kid lol. Life has shown that lessons can be taught in a very difficult way.. but I believe in finding the little things of beauty in everyday life.. more..

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