To Socialize

To Socialize

A Poem by Therene
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I have witnessed One of the greatest manifestation Of human social connection.

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Social experiments, as we would call them,

Are one of the easiest ways to prove

The indestructible chain.

But more delicately proven

Is when a certain group

Unites in spirit and virtue.


Humanitarian efforts,

Environmental rallies, and

Political games.

More often than not,

These are social experiments

Meant to try and test human interactions.


To help a person in need,

To return a great favor to our origin,

And to cry out for justice

Are just few of the reasons

Why we stand and claim

That we are one and the same.


Under one heaven,

Today I’ve seen how

A minority became powerful.

Only through cooperation,

Unity, and communication

Was this made possible.

© 2010 Therene


Author's Note

Therene
This was written on whim.

Do tell me what you think and point out the technical errors. :D

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This is one write I wish was mine. Reflects my own thoughts...
Liked the message it gives out very much.... ;))

Posted 14 Years Ago


Time to review for you! :)

To be honest, this was too prose-poem like for me. While your theme was beautiful, I felt that it could have been *expressed* a little more. In other words, it was very inspirational and well-written, but not very poetic. Admittedly, this could just be my naturally emotional and sappy personality spilling over, demanding some more verbose, status quo piece. ; )
Still well-written and with little grammatical flaw (even with this poem's addiction to commas).
9.6/10

Posted 14 Years Ago


Man. What a poem. You are just a motivator. You've stressed what good can come from banding together. Its amazing how many it took to raise this minority, but it didnt happen. What a lesson.

Posted 14 Years Ago


this is different but i get the point. when a group comes together for the same cause it is uplifting and exciting. well done.

Posted 14 Years Ago


"Social experiments, as we would call it,"....call "them"...experiments is plural.
"Are one of the easiest way to prove"..."ways"...plural
"Unites in spirit and in virtue."..second "in" not required
"Too often than not,"...replace "too" with "more"..."More often than not..."
"Meant to try and test human interaction."..."interactions"...plural

Hope this helps. Interesting read.





Posted 14 Years Ago



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