My Footsteps Echo

My Footsteps Echo

A Poem by papaed
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Response to a challenge to use ten words

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MY FOOTSTEPS ECHO


I stand, hiding in the shadows

breathing slowly, I await my prize

My flat black robe with hood and belt

My face a mask, my hand on scythe


Her figure strolls the shadowed street

Drunkenly approaching my lair

I step out, calmly strike my pose

I savor the moonlit wet air


I stand before her, a promise

That precious moment that I crave

Her mouth a rictus of surprise 

Her thoughts of situation grave


The moment stretches to action

No digging, no dragging, no chase 

Wild eyes dart for cover or escape

Just a clean sweep of scythe through space


In her I see your sneering face

A powerful joyous revulsion

throat-ripping, primal, panicked screaming

Victim to a deadly compulsion


I study your bloody corpse

I turn my back, consider the tally

Moon sparkling in a pool of blood

My slow footsteps echo up the alley

© 2015 papaed


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You naughty poet papaed! You must post this to our contest so people can see it! It's too good to miss reviews on! Thank you for a wonderful read!

Here's the link....it closes tomorrow, so be quick! (the 10th my date, you might have a bit longer)

http://www.writerscafe.org/contests/HELENA%27S-TEN-WORDS-POETRY-CONTEXT/51140/

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

papaed

9 Years Ago

I thought I did post it to the contest. I'll try again.
Helena

9 Years Ago

Oh, good! Thanks dear poet!



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Gripping piece, exceptional use of italics to emphasise words.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

"Victim to a deadly compulsion

I study your bloody corpse
I turn my back, consider the tally"

An outstanding and gripping write. You are talented, sir...:)........

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

nice and very deep. for its meaning one needs to go through it. I liked it very much and not enough expert to give any critical comment on this.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

damn! daarrrk!
this piece gave me goosebumps,
I love your talent ..thanks for sharing

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

You have a gift!!!
I love your ink.. ..

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

a good and visceral aftertaste...

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is chilling, dark and has a taste for blood and deadly corpse, it's a good write and a brave effort

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Oh what inspiration one can get from 10 words! I would love to know what those ten words were!
Structurally I think you have done a very good job. And the rhyming is not at all stilted. Good read.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

papaed

8 Years Ago

The ten words are in italics. The words brought a dark vision to me. Thank you for reading and com.. read more
Hahaha, thrilling and exciting write. Well done.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This was great! I read it twice!!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Kansas City, MO



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