My Sister

Two versions of an Alfred Dorn Sonnet... A linked sestet, a rhyming couplet, and an alternating sestet. First in ABCABC DD AEAEAE rhyming format and the second in ABABAB CC ADADAD rhyming format

 ABCABC DD AEAEAE format

 

My sister always gets her way.

She yells and screams till I give in.

She cries and pouts till I feel bad.

I never like it when we play.

She makes up rules I cannot win,

then laughs at me to make me mad.

 

I find I cannot resist her.

Maybe she’s not my real sister.

 

I make up ways to make her pay.

I try to stick her with a pin.

She just dodges out of the way.

Would hitting her be such a sin?

I wish I didn’t have to stay,

but I’m just eight and she is ten.

 

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ABABAB CC ADADAD format

 

My sister always gets her way.

She cries and pouts till I feel bad.

I never like it when we play.

She laughs at me to make me mad.

I follow her around all day.

She runs away.  It makes me sad.

 

I find I cannot resist her.

Maybe she’s not my real sister.

 

I make up ways to make her pay.

I try to stick her with a pin.

She just dodges out of the way.

Would hitting her be such a sin?

I wish I didn’t have to stay,

but I’m just eight and she is ten.

Reviews

[Stacey Watts]

this is very cute. Excellent way to display this piece. Reminds me of my brother haha. Very well written

[Salvatore Buttaci]

Congratulations for winning the Alfred-Dorn-Sonnet contest!

[James Paulin]

Nice to read both versions. Thank you for your complimentary review of Upon Summer. Your work is very enjoyable and well crafted.

[angelina neves]

so lovely! Beautiful the two of them!

[Poeticpiers]

How very true to life and true to form also. I prefer the first

[Helena]

"I find I cannot resist her.
Maybe she's not my real sister."

How cute is this??!!

Your pen certainly has a way with words and "form"s (no matter what the form!)
This is a phenomenal poem my friend. Bravo!!

Kind regards,
Helena

[Morning Bliss]

Well, I don't know about the format ways, but I found this poem cute and wonderful. I've been were this character's been. My sister drives me insane despite the fact that she's one and I'm older. Hah, but anyways, I liked this writing very much and thank you for sharing! :)