The Illusion becomes a vision

common things we see everyday in the system

A ray of sunlight that could not being hold

give warmed

A breeze of wind that could not be caught

 soothe inside the heart

An air that could not be seen

 Fill the lungs with an oxygen

Poison gas that could not be smelt

Dried up the living   

A letter in the unfolded envelope

Could be held but  never be read

A trust for a liar, punishment for honestly

Left with chaos and anarchy

When the  illusion becomes  a vision

Reviews

[Edward Lancheister]

Interesting piece of writing Nyong Edward, you almost capture the thoughts, or especially "Visions" of someone, through disbalance in their brain, the chemistry that's not in the right value, and Psychosis thereof, this said, it also has a huge important glimpse you want to show us, of how the system works, and how things, can go wrong there. Poignant. Well done.

- Elisa

[Edward Lancheister]

Thank you Nona Elisa for great review, really mean a lot to me :)

Edward

You are very welcome dear Nyong Edward. The pleasure was all mine.

[shutbudholdsabee]

An exploration of the importance of the ingraspable and untouchable in life. Excellent connections to things we wouldn't think are related, and an interesting perspective. Keep it up!

[Edward Lancheister]

thank you for generous review of my poem

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Some deep words of expressing Edward I agree with 100%, you did an awesome job:)

[Edward Lancheister]

Thanks Jonathan for stop by and encouraging review. :)

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Your very welcome:)

[Red68]

very good, like the way the lines are formed.

[Edward Lancheister]

thanks for the review

[Konigin]

woah
This is so simple... yet your idea is brilliant and wonderful.
I really liked this one Edward! :)

[Edward Lancheister]

thank you my Friend Chelsea, feel free to share with all your friends. :)

[Konigin]

You're welcome Edward. I will! :)

[Edward Lancheister]

thank you Chelsea

[Devayani Reddi]

When something written evokes crystal clear pictures and memories in your mind, it becomes a work of art. Your poem is definitely one of those beautifully structured poems that brings images. Great work! :)

[Edward Lancheister]

thank you for your kindness review. i will keep write much more

[Rene Salinas]

Really nice embelishment here I love the way this twists and turns without letting us now that nothing is concrete. That nothing can betaken for granted and maybe use again and again as a recepie for success.
Even when a mighty breath is taken and one one assume that spirit inhaled intentions may be able to achieve the impossible we are let to know that that air also contains an undesired presence that may or may not be dangerous. As illusion manifests and brings with it a feeling that unsettles.

Thankyou Edward

[Edward Lancheister]

thanks for stop by and give an inspiration words. even many words could be more vanish in vain.

[Matching Socks]

Sometimes it's the things we can't see that can be most harmful, but other things can be inspirational.
All depends what you believe. Good thoughts here. Very unique.

[Edward Lancheister]

Thank you Ance for stop by and read my poem. Really mean a lot to me