Woman

I am laced with broken

wires that spark

just beneath my skin--they

burn little black stars

amidst my charred freckles

and my speech

is electrical smoke:

         for I am both woman

         and dragon.

 

My heart screams with high

voltage, pumping electrons

through my lightning-scribed body.

 

I pulse for you, through

each mundane maestrom of a

minute--you, who shocked

me with the current of life.

 

and now, I am

charged with luminescence.

Reviews

[bob, small b. aka invs]

i love the images invoked here. i can almost feel the electricity flowing from you in these words.

[Le parisien]

Great sound and, I think it's useless to point out how amazing your metrica is, at some points it was extremely visual, it def gave that "something-more" to every word.
Great job :)

[eglantine]

thank you! :)

[EileenMarie]

Ohhh I like this :) very intriguing........ Great poem!

[Hidden Happiness]

electric and amazing...absolutely big fan of feminist poems great job...

[eglantine]

[Peacelovewrite]

Wow very electrifying! Makes me wanna read on...

[joshua deathdealer]

I'm in awe. Electrifying.. Awesome work.

[eglantine]

thanks :)

[Kailor Mason]

All women have power from God that makes them stronger, more beautiful, more fierce and more passionate than any man on the planet. That's a very literal truth, and this poem describes that really well. You are "charged with luminescence". When a man sees the woman that he truly loves and burns for, that electric charge happens to him--24/7. This poem is beautiful. :)

[eglantine]

Thank you bunches--I'm glad you enjoyed it

[Frank James Davis]

Luscious lyrics and HD imagery make this piece incredibly sensual--and more.
"Woman" strikes me as being profoundly romantic; it hardly seems possible this sort of seismic reaction only began in the physical; only impacts the physical.
In any event, "Woman" is an exceptional poem, written by someone who knows how to write--perhaps, even, how to live.

[eglantine]

Thank you very much :) I appreciate your feedback

[MOON]

Lovely write and well charged with luminescence that just a perfect line .