I Will Destroy You

Think before you take my hand,

One dance with me, you'll be my biggest fan

Ill seduce you with my feel good charm

Make you feel so good, you'll think I'll cause no harm

You'll love me for a little while,

I bet I'll be the only reason for your smile

after a while you'll start to see

that with me, is not where you want to be

I will destroy you I will make you steal, make you lie

I will make you wish you were dead

If you're smart, you'll rid of me before you're too far ahead

I will rob you of your money, your family, and your mind

You'll lose everything if you don't leave me behind

My name is Heroin and if you think you want me around

Think twice, or I may be the reason you're in the ground

 

Reviews

[JE_Platypus]

I thought this was about a woman to start and then the poem took a dark turn toward the middle. The title gave good foreshadowing to that, but it was still a little unexpected (but in a good way)! Addiction is a crushing disease and the poem does a good job highlighting the double edged sword that it becomes for people who suffer from it.

As for the poem itself, it was easy to read and it presented its points well. The first half was especially good with lines like "Ill seduce you with my feel good charm" - which has a nice rhythmic playfulness that makes me feel like I'm being seduced. In the second half I would have liked more concrete imagery. I think you could have made the drug even more frightening by describing it being used rather than simply saying it was Heroin.

Overall, this poem draws attention to an issue that needs more of it. People fall prey to addiction everyday, and not just heroin but even "legal" drugs like pain-killers and alcohol. Thanks for throwing some light on the issue!

[E.Jay]

Thank you so much for your feedback, I really appreciate ideas, and such. Anything to help better my writing! Thanks for reading!

[William Liston]

I love the way you've conveyed the message of this piece, with the irony at the end. I thought it was about a woman at first ... but as I kept reading, I wasn't so sure ... the second-to-last line almost hit me by surprise.

The message is true too. So many people are addicted to drugs that it's saddening, and I think this poem gives a good description of how heroin (or any type of drug) can seem harmless and innocent at first, but eventually, it becomes your worst nightmare. Thank you for sharing this piece, E. Jay.

- William Liston

[andrew mitchell]

Heroin and ice such deadly addictions spread by low life that have no respect for people's lives.
That's what I think unless medusa changed her name to Heroin, she would do that, just to become modern mythology.

[KLMazon]

I immediately thought of drugs, esp heroin. It's destruction is rampant in my hometown. :(

[E.Jay]

I am a Psychology in Addiction major. Heroin is such an epidemic,addiction is a sad thing.