I See America Dying

I See America Dying

A Poem by Alz Alz
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Inspired by Walt Whitman. Perhaps one of the most powerful pieces I've written.

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I see America dying, so many hearses rolling by,
With a young white rose placed on each coffin, the mothers receive the folded flags.
A little brother, waving the red, the white, and the blue, will now always look upward to his brother, While the silent high school sweetheart stands beside the road to watch the parade go by, with the
tears of a broken heart trickling down her numb cheeks.
The grandmother cries, and the grandfather comforts her while remembering the soldier as a child " laughing, giggling, growing, rebellious, and finally commited to such a worthy cause.
The aunts and uncles sit silently with the cousins, not knowing what to say, not able to bear the pain alone, yet they know that many others feel the same.
These young men had yet to begin their lives, so much promise, so many dreams, all gone in a boom and a flash,
I see America dying, a country washing away its guilt with all the silent tears.

© 2010 Alz Alz



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Alz Alz
Inspired by Walt Whitman. Perhaps one of the most powerful pieces I've written.

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This is so overwhelmingly sad... Your writing here is vivid, painted with the desperation of this great loss... one that will never be fully understood... One life at a time left breathless... and we feel the emotion and pain through your brilliant words.. Truly powerful...


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This is so overwhelmingly sad... Your writing here is vivid, painted with the desperation of this great loss... one that will never be fully understood... One life at a time left breathless... and we feel the emotion and pain through your brilliant words.. Truly powerful...


Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wow! That hit me, real bad. you have a lot of truth in your words. 'I See America Dying' 'ses it all. Those words can conjure up so many meanings. I'm not from america, but I can somehow understand this, I may not understand the full affect of what Americans feel, but I can understand.
"I see America dying, a country washing away its guilt with all the silent tears."
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Powerful lines, like a power punch to the face, you're words re inspiring and deep. But i find the best lines to be Stanza/verse 3. The nostalgic feeling all grandmothers and mothers will have of their boy, who was once a child. I loved this. You did a brilliant job with this. :)

Keep writing, always
indie♥

Posted 7 Years Ago


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brings across an excellent message. at first I thought it was a story since it wasn't broken up, but I had no idea that Walt Whitman did poems that way. you learn something new every day =)

Posted 7 Years Ago


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this is a great poem. good job!

Posted 7 Years Ago


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A powerful poem. War leaves deep wounds to the families of Soldiers lost in War. Your description is fact. Family will never understand why a young person comes home wrapped in a flag. I hope for the Wars to end. Each day more Soldiers will learn death and carry mental disorders till death. Whitman wrote of a sad times in USA history. You wrote of the new sadness. Long Wars that drain our youth and budget. I hope it is worth the cost. Mark Twain explain the answer in "The War Prayer." There will be no winner. A outstanding poem.
Coyote

Posted 7 Years Ago


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This is truely a poem that grabbs at the heart. Well done!

Posted 7 Years Ago


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Ignore all those of nay. If they get fine, if they don't fine. Just smile and go on with your successes. I found this to be a powerful write. You have captured the form superbly well. And the subject matter is no lightweight, either. You have done well here. Keep it up. I have nothing but admiration and encouragement for you. Never back down from that in which you believe, lest you fall for anything...

Posted 7 Years Ago


I can see walt whitman just looking at the form. whitman proved that poetry can be born of its form rather than created by rules, this is one of the most powerful poems i have read, in general, and its brilliant, the alliteration goes off like fireworks. wow, you should write more like this!

Posted 7 Years Ago



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