This is Death

 

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Icy Touch

Blank Face

No Response

Unset Pace

Unbroken Silence 

Serene Eyes

Futile Words

Deceptive Lies

Sanguine Blood

Heart of Lead

Peaceful Countenance

Hatred Bred

Passing Time

Pernicious Night

Apathy

Misleading Light

Free of life

Lack of Breath

Unbeating heart

This is Death

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Reviews

[Mioki]

Hm, this was a unique view on death. Although it wasn't wordy, you were still able to get a reaction from the reader, and it had meaning. Some poems with a lot of words aren't even able to do that, so I give you kudos for getting it in there. This poem also makes the reader feel slightly fearful and cold at the same time. "What is death?" they begin to ask themselves. Well, your poem sounds what I imagine it would be like. This was a very thought enticing piece, I'm glad to have read it.

[Jonathan Ballam]

Loved the ending that just seemed to thump home. This poem almost felt like a chant. Great Job!

[DamienHino]

wow your an awesome writer, Imagery is everything and it seems to come natural to you. Few words each line, wonderful rhythm , I love the structure. I havn't even got to the meaning, which is also deep and creatively shown.

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

This poem is easy to read and it flows nicely. Its sad but death doesn't always come in a beautiful way. As I read this poem for the 3rd time, it almost seemed as if it was a theory of the stages the mind may go through before death. I found that it became more interesting when i looked at it in that way. Many hit songs are basically lists. The format in this piece was perfect.

[Marquise]

Futile Words

Deceptive Lies


Very well thought and good choice of words.. deceptives lies is death. you found a way to make the readers have no choice but to be captivated by a word choice because there are to omany good ones to ignore. Something will hit home.

thanks new friend. look forward to more of your excellent writing.

[Prodigo]

Wicked..I like it

[Just Charles]

Though not wordy, you were able to convey such a powerful point. I love the way you used words in this poem. I detest poems that are wordy. And surely, this poem wasn't wordy. Good poem.

[Sheila Marie Carr]

A very powerful straight to the point on death. Great job I love dark poems about death

[WildeWhore]

people seem fond of the word "sanguine".
I must be missing out on something... I'd never heard of it.

so despite my own ignorance obscuring the meaning in that one line, I heartily enjoyed the rest of this. Perhaps "heartily" isn't the right word.. for the subject matter. It's very good, anyway.

[fern66_99]

THis is genious!!

i love it! :)

[Sexy P3nguin]

This a great poem.. I really like the way you were able to describe death without using many words that shows that your an amazing poet.. Well i my book anyway. lol Great poem! :P