Mountain Climber

The higher you climb, the better it gets

And each time you fall, you live with regrets

I've learned that your dreams are always in reach

That sunshine gets brighter, and odd ends always meet

Patience is a virtue, yet I find it hard to wait

But we each have a plan, our own predetermined fate

I've been taught to think fast, but to speak slow with my mouth

As a mountain climber once told me, "If you want to be a bird, migrate South"

Reviews

[Abdul Aziz]

Simple, uncomplicated, elegant. I like the way you rhyme here. It looks as if each succcessive line gets bigger. The flow is very good.
I found myself agreeing with everything except "our own predetermined fate". Is our fate predetermined, in that everything is written before we do it? I think its different. But it is interesting.
Good job. I liked reading this :)

[Dinesh Sairam]

Simplistic and beautiful. Very very minor corrections (Er, maybe suggestion) from me : The third line could end with a rhyming word to 'Reach' (That sunshine gets brighter, and odd ends meet each?). Um.. and 'Wait' and 'Fate' don't rhyme comfortably.. I'd suggest 'Patience is a virtue, I stand outside it's gate' or something similar. Again, these are minor correction, and can conveniently be ignored. Perfect poem there. My favorites and 100 :) Keep writing.

[deeps]

This is wonderful, i like this.

[Kiddx]

I've been taught to think fast, but to speak slow with my mouth
As a mountain climber once told me, "If you want to be a bird, migrate South"

This is cute and well written

[A. K. MAXIMILIEN]

I luv your philosophical poetic writing!! :)

[Cassiopia Summers]

This is great! (: It's simple, but the simplicity is what makes it great. (: So much said in such little words.