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My Happy Place

My Happy Place

A Story by Emily Mac
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My first story, hope you like it!

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One press, one movement. That's all it took and I could be released. Released from the chains wrapped around my wrists and ankles. One action, one bullet and I could find my happy place. I could be released from the pain, the screaming constantly pulsing around my head. The hammer hitting down on my heart could be stopped. The tears running down my face could be dried and everything I've lost could be found. I could stop everything that's going wrong, all I had to make was one press, one movement.

© 2017 Emily Mac



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The second sentence - "took" isn't the right tense for the rest of your monologue. It IS a dramatic "moment".

Posted 1 Month Ago


This was really nice and the title was so interesting..I would be happy if you write more about this...
Keep on writing...

Posted 2 Months Ago


This is amazing, I would love to read more of this!

Posted 1 Year Ago


Happy place...an interesting choice of title. You portrayed the girl in a desperate situation with the few words you used. But with those words you gave me the visons of a woman strapped in one of those rooms you see in the moves. One choice....one chance...choose. this piece feels let it could be a prologue to a great story of cat and mouse.

Good work.
Mark.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Intense than that one press & one bullet !!!

Posted 1 Year Ago


I am amazed! You are so creative. You got to say… it creates a LOT of suspense! I never really found death as a happy place. But this short story sent the message that people have different ways of seeing life. WELL DONE!!

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A powerful paragraph.

But if that is your 'Happy Place', I hate to think what the 'Sad Place' is like.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Emily Mac

1 Year Ago

Thank you very much for your review, I really appreciate it. Haha I don't think you would want to kn.. read more
I like the suspense and the cliffhanging ending.
Will they or won't they?
This is a self-talk featuring the pros - would there be a balancing self-talk full of cons - would they live long enough...?
Nicely done.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Emily Mac

1 Year Ago

Thank you very much for your kind words. They mean a lot.
This story is absolutely amazing. I love it how you made it all mysterious with the short sentences. The story is nicely detailed and well written. GOOD JOB! Keep writing!

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Emily Mac

1 Year Ago

Thank you very much for your comment! It means a lot!

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Added on January 15, 2017
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Emily Mac
Emily Mac

United Kingdom



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Hi... So I'm Emily and this is my page, I write all sorts of short stories, anything that comes to mind. If you like my stories please leave a comment and if there is anything you want me to write pl.. more..


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