The Wondrous Land

To sojourn underneath these clustered trees

That gently sway within the gentle breeze

Is merely what ’twould take to understand

There’s nothing grander than this wondrous land.

No serpents slide along the grassy ground,

No daunting beasts disturb the peace around.

The sky has never known the time of day-

Stars brightly shine with ev’ry solar ray.

The soft breath of the ever soothing wind

Assures me always I have never sinned.

The running streams that ever flow in song

Invite the world to with them flow along.

The daffodils and daisies ev’ry year

Bloom fair and dainty, spreading love and cheer.

The trees cast out a warm and welcome shade

In which to lie and watch this lovely glade.

The air is sweet, the sod is rich, ’tis plain

’Twas marked by Heaven as divine domain.

For never has their been a place so grand,

Nor more alluring than this wondrous land.

-EDP

Reviews

[H L Rose]

Beautiful creation of a little paradise. It’s like a piece of a dream that’s been bundled together in some short words, and you can simply pull them out whenever you want to visit it.

I especially like the image of the swaying trees, and the fact that it’s night, yet the stars shine brightly enough that you can still see the daffodils.

[emipoemi]

Thank you so much! Indeed it was intended to be somewhat of a paradise/dreamland. Glad you enjoyed it.

[Heather]

It almost sounds like you're describing the Garden of Eden before the fall. Some of the diction I thought gave a biblical feel to the poem. It sounds perfect but almost too good to be true... I guess that's the cynic in me though ;)

[emipoemi]

lol. This is one of my older pieces. My oldest poems are heavy on the romantic themes, structure, and diction. I didn't have Eden in mind upon writing this, but I'm open to any interpretation, for I allow all my poems to be open to interpretation. Makes it all the more fun for the reader. Glad you enjoyed this. Thanks for reading.

[Heather]

Yeah, I don't normally put a religious spin on my interpretations but the words "serpents", "sinned", "Heaven", and "divine" made Eden pop into my mind lol. It was a great read.

[emipoemi]

it must have just written itself like that, then, for Eden was not consciously soon my mind when I was writing it. lol. Thanks again.

[emipoemi]

consciously *on my mind (don't know what happened there).

[Zoya]

Makes me fall in love with our land all over again! Though I see the nature slowly deteriorating and peace gradually seeping out of this world, there still are quite many places on earth that reflect heavenly beauty and are wonderful to be at.
I guess there's some error in the 12th line...maybe a missing word, or a typo. Or maybe it's just me.
I truly loved this poem. Well done!

[emipoemi]

"Lull all to sleep to with them flow along" - Lull all to sleep [in order] to flow along with them. That's what the line means. Thanks for your concern. And thanks for reading. Indeed much of our world is slowly deteriorating, but that doesn't mean we should stop fighting to save what's left of it. Glad you enjoyed it.

[Zoya]

Of course. It's our duty to protect the world. Most welcome.

[emipoemi]

Even though my line did make sense in the end, your comment got me thinking.....and so I decided to change it.

[Zoya]

What confused me the last time was the positioning of the words 'to', 'with' and 'them'. But once you explained and highlighted the hidden 'in order to', I quite much got it. It reads fine now. It read fine earlier, too. It probably was just me.

[Great Aunt Astri]

What a lovely appreciation of nature. Also a metaphor of what life could be like. I think the daunting beasts and serpents are still there, but because of your heartfelt love and appreciation, you just don't see them. Wonderful way to be!

[Kathy Van Kurin]

emipoemi,
"The Wondrous Land"
The photograph above is a wonderful hint of what you speak in this poem. First line, "Sojourn under clustered trees. The mention of breezes and no sin, no serpents. of daffodils and streams that ever flow in song. A well rounded tribute to the spirit stirring power of this setting.
A love song in response to earthly beauty; Last 4 lines,""The air is sweet, the sod is rich, 'tis plain.'Twas marked by Heaven as divine domain. For never has their been a place so grand, nor more alluring than this wondrous land."
I enjoyed this one very much!
Kathy

[emipoemi]

Glad you did. Thanks for reading.

[Kathy Van Kurin]

Yes indeed. I wish you a wonderful day and many little treasures scattered here and there to behold.
Blessings,
Kathy

[Nolo Segundo]

I envy your lyrical talent!

[emipoemi]

There's a whole club that does.

[Gaia Octavia]

I want to go here! The tone of this piece throughout is peaceful, tranquil, and comforting. Everyone should have their own 'wondrous land' to close their eyes and visit. Wonderful!

[Raven Moonchild]

Absolutely beautiful, this poem. :) I can feel the wind and smell the daffodils. :)

[emipoemi]

What? Not the daisies? (hahaha!)

Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it.

[Raven Moonchild]

lol Daffodils are my favourite. :) (sniffs the daisies) :3

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

A wondrous land indeed! It sounds like heaven on earth. This is beautifully writ.

[Psychotic Lily]

This is a truly wonderful piece. I'm already understanding how to work with musicality thanks to your poem. What you have said is true that musicality gives out 'something' amazing from within the poem.

[emipoemi]

Glad you enjoyed it! And it's good you're picking up my pointers, too, even though, this being one of the poems during my first phase (of 3), it's not exactly the perfect example to discuss musicality, for the rhythm is strict. But it's a start indeed, and you can definitely hear a bit of what I'm talking about.

Thanks for commenting.