The Carousel

The Carousel

A Poem by emipoemi

It may seem lively, swift, ideal,

It may seem languid, dull, surreal.

It all depends on how we feel

Upon the carousel.

 

We rise to only come back down,

At times we laugh, at times we frown

Amidst the green, red, white, and brown,

Upon the carousel.

 

To try for more velocity

We kick out mounts, but find that we

Have not so much authority

Upon the carousel.

 

The music plays its lilting tune,

As though our driving force and boon

Beneath the sun, beneath the moon,

Upon the carousel.

 

Still up and down, still going strong,

Preserving right and shunning wrong,

We learn that nothing lasts too long

Upon the carousel.

 

Should there be breakdowns, brave the trial!

Should love be found, stay true and smile!

Whate’er we do must be worthwhile

Upon the carousel.

 

The music fades, and warns ’tis done,

Our mounts grow weary from the run,

We give them thanks for all the fun

Upon the carousel.

 

However, being satisfied,

We shortly find ourselves astride

Another mount, once more to ride

Upon the carousel.


-EDP


© 2017 emipoemi



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Great picture and analogy. One of those where I'm thinking 'God why didn't I think of that!!!!' I like the strict meter, though personally I'm no fan of "t'wixt" and "whate'er" type words.

Gosh, I can't get over it. Such as wonderful platform, and well done for returning to it as the final line each time. The only other 'carousel' writing I can think of is the old Hollies song from the 1960s, and that wasn't nearly as lyrically interesting as this.

Nice work!

Posted 3 Months Ago


Nigel Newman

3 Months Ago

I was semi-joking, semi in earnest. I may try the London Eye again. I think I did it a bit quickly a.. read more
Nigel Newman

3 Months Ago

If you do come to London, I'd certainly recommend going on the Eye, and I'd especially advise twilig.. read more
emipoemi

3 Months Ago

....I've been to London.....went to visit a friend a couple of years back....he says it wasn't worth.. read more
The reason I like your poetry so much (if I have not said it already) is the rhyme scheme. You know just where and how to place things. Your imagery takes the reader away from where he/she is. Quite amazing!

Posted 3 Months Ago


emipoemi

3 Months Ago

Well, I've had about 10 years experience, so my ear has properly tuned to hearing where the sounds h.. read more
I don't think I've ever seen someone compare life to a carousel on here, but I'm surprised that I haven't because it is a very good comparison. There are ups and downs, but we keep striding on. I loved this.

~Luna

Posted 3 Months Ago


emipoemi

3 Months Ago

I'm so glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for reading!
Such is this magical mystery ride called life; and when our turn is over, the ride will continue with others taking our place. Well penned.

Posted 3 Months Ago


emipoemi

3 Months Ago

Thank you! Glad you enjoyed it.
I can remember being on one and the feeling I had. I think there are metaphors lurking between the lines of this great poem. I could be wrong. But nevertheless, nice descriptions and flow. :)

Posted 3 Months Ago


emipoemi

3 Months Ago

There are lurking metaphors indeed. Glad you enjoyed it.

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