The Trial of Love

The Trial of Love

A Poem by emipoemi

She swishes her feet through the river,
He watches, entranced, from the bank.
A bulk of a man with an eyepatch
Encloses a rock in his hands.
She echoes a tune through the zephyrs,
He cries, looking down at himself,
And falls, wilted-winged, in the river,
As the eyepatch man stonily stands.


© 2018 emipoemi

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the way I’m reading this it seems the man with the eye patch has a good throw, but I quite often get it wrong too :)

Posted 10 Months Ago


10 Months Ago

You're quite right. If you research the Greek myth that I'm alluding to here, you'll find out just h.. read more
you gave me a beautiful lesson in greek mythology with your bold descriptions. you taught me as i had to do some background homework to appreciate the fullness of your written tale. nice imagery. good work ... :)

Posted 10 Months Ago


10 Months Ago

thank you! Glad you enjoyed it. The fact you did the extra work is even more wowing...didn't think m.. read more
I really like this. The diction especially struck me.. the crisp sounds of the descriptive words combining with the visual imagery.. and I heard the water too.

I like how you invited me to this as it somewhat 'echoes' my Narcissus and Echo poem. :)

She's just there, simply, beautifully graceful. He is in stark contrast to her. I enjoyed the parallel last lines of each stanza: him holding the rock in his hands and then stonily standing.. it's as if he did something, is guilty of something, troubled by his past and who he is and he can't let that go.. so it shaped who he eternally became. It turned him to stone and he wasted away into the river. Perhaps in the reflection of her beauty and grace, he was finally faced with himself and his troubling realities.

I loved this.. for its ancient ring and also for its pain. You can feel it. Thank you for sharing!!

Posted 11 Months Ago


11 Months Ago

You know more than me..... what I'm doing in this poem is telling a modern version of the myth: She'.. read more
Alexa Apothic Red

11 Months Ago

That is fun! I like how you weaved more than 1 myth together!! It keeps the reader thinking and adds.. read more

11 Months Ago

That's the way I play the game ;) Again, thanks for reading. Glad you enjoyed it.

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Added on February 2, 2018
Last Updated on February 2, 2018
Tags: poetry, poem, love, mythology




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