Some People Have Real Problems

Inspired by Dearly Beloved. Doubting the worth of your own problems.

I can see the morning with my eyes closed
No one's talking but I can hear echoes
Playing games with old shoelaces
strung high, strung tight, like our heart rate

Can't you see me when I'm taking off my sundress
You can see me whenever I get undressed
Blue veins hot face like a city's nest
trying out, breathing hard, I'm unrest

I'm done I've given it my best shot
These ribs don't take the hardest throb
It's funny when you're so jaded
Take a moment and blame it on the wasted

Some people have real problems
Some people have real problems
Some people have real problems
Some people have real problems

Reviews

[Paradox]

A read it a few times before seeing your comment about it being more of a song lyric. I think it works much better that way and can hear/feel a haunting melody from a female singer with a gravel filled voice. Nicely done.

[SLOVA]

I'm counting on the gravel, aha. Thank you for your kind comment.

[Mila]

We always like to think that our problems are worse than others and it doesn't make it any better when people try to convince us otherwise. It does help, however, to know that people do suffer as we do. Very profound writing, but then ending was a little off for me. Other than that, it was wonderful! Well done!

[SLOVA]

Thank you for your kind review, Mila. The last four repeated lines are actually supposed to verify the insignificance of one's one problems compared to others (i.e. - people that have real problems).

[marcus]

good, but I'm not so sure about the ending..

[SLOVA]

What's the matter?

[marcus]

I dunno? A little repetitive perhaps? I guess I want a little more.. what are the real problems?

[marcus]

I like it! just the meaning isn't entirely clear to me. Just trying to be helpful.

[SLOVA]

Ah yes haha, thanks. It was meant to be lyrics to a song, actually. That explains the repetition. As for the meaning, it's basically the thought of "my problems are nothing compared to others'".

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=1GcdFblRySM&feature=youtu.be

[marcus]

I'm definitely feeling it as a song!

[Not here]

fantastic! that was one of the best pieces ive read in a long time. going into my library for sure

[Malister Mikey]

I rather enjoyed this piece it made a lot of things play in my head while I was reading it. I am someone who knows fully well of real problems lol. Great work Sincerely, Malister Mikey

[Indra Neil]

a profound write that reflects the everyday reality wonderfully! the imagery is brilliant! well done! :)

[JulianaSun]

Yep, some people have real problems, and most days I feel like my problems are bigger and more burdening than other people´s problems. Life seems unfair when distributing the amount of pain each of us must endure. But maybe that´s just how I think...

J

[terry smith]

Beautiful!! I love it!!Disturbing the world is rippling the waves of you into the symphony of life's song!