Embattled Knight

Hollow hearts lead us not

Into brimming springs of hope’s descent

Little lies are laid like fine knots

Sewn in the fabric of love’s intent

 

Wallow in the wine of sin’s disdain

In the stomach of the darkest night

Evil thoughts stand down, refrain

Sheath thy sword ‘til morning’s light

 

Shallow is the grave of the strayed dog

And deep are the roots of the pure

But all that is seen is unseen in the fog

Tempted by the mystery of the obscure

 

To risk all this for just a kiss

And succumb to the howl of a starved soul

The home is built on more than this

Its equal parts sustain the whole

 

Swallow the breath of familiar lips

In the victorious morning light

One body, one hunger could not eclipse

The heart of the embattled knight

 

Author's Note

This poem is conveying the battle to remain faithful. Any comments are appreciated.

Reviews

[Belator Books]

Ah, the unending struggle of fidelity, whether in the mind, body or both. The valiant effort in this piece is noted, the bittersweet victory attained. Well done. The line I liked most was:

"Wallow in the wine of sin's disdain
In the stomach of the darkest night"

These lines portray well the strife and sorrow of love, yet also of its familiar comfort upon arriving home untainted. Your pen drips with the ink of Talent. This gets my first 100 rating as the succinct use of words while giving a complete picture is fantastic as well as a satisfying read.

[INF]

"Sheath thy sword ‘til morning’s light" ?

looks like: Sir Walter Scott - 1811 - Drama
Your sword drawn too? For Heaven's sake, sheath it, sir — The sight distracts me. Bev. Whose voice ... Here shall my soul brood c?erits miseries, till, with the fiends of hell, and guilty of the earth, I start and tremble at the morning's light.

[Priscilla Sayers]

Oh dear... You didn't even need an Author's note to explain the message, the battle, the struggle, it is all very well conveyed. Powerful and it draws the reader in as we discover the depths, as further and further it goes. Great one.

[Seracies]

That was truly beautiful. There was a noble air about it that had the distinct feel of the old realms of knights and codes of honour. I would have pasted my favourite lines, but then I would have had to highlight the entire poem.

[trinityluv122]

um what a brilliant write flash, to risk all this for just a kiss is so noble and romantic

love it Lara