Forever needed

even when they can hardly carry themselves they will still gladly bear your weight without a second thought.

Like the woven patches of a comforting quilt

That hold sacred memories so dear

Wrapped around our slender arms

In an always welcome embrace.

 

Like a warm bath, fragrant and soft

Soothing away our aches and chills.

Lavender bubbles and rising steam

Relax our troubled hearts.

 

Like the smiling sun lighting our way

And casting aside our fears

The dark path ahead of us all

No longer daunts the mind.

 

With the strength of a nations army

Standing so strong and proud

We know we’re always protected

By the ever relentless will.

 

With the gentleness of a summer breeze

Caressing our rosy cheeks

Our tears are soon wiped away

Replaced by an innocent gleam.

 

For a child of any age

A mother’s love is forever needed

To help us along our way

 

For when we ever lose our strength

At our sides she will always be

To carry us in her arms

until we can once again stand on our own

Stand strong, tall and free.

Author's Note

any thoughts, comments

Reviews

[NotYourChinaDoll]

I like this alot, especially the stanza about the army. This was a very good image. Your last stanza is great too, I wouldn't change a thing about it. Some of this was a bit typical, simple, like something you might see on a greeting card. Not that that is necessarily a bad thing. It was very sweet. I liked it a lot.

[FlawedByDesign]

I'll agree with NotYourChinaDoll and her review. "Some" of the poem is simple and somewhat cliche, but it does a great job at casting that Hallmark sweetness :)
I like that you have compared a mother's love/support to some less obvious things, such as the "patches of a quilt" or the "gentleness of a summer breeze".

Well done.

[Clarisse Nanoit]

Very nice imagery. I'm a little touchy about mother poems, but I really enjoyed this one. Good stuff. I think you definitely did justice to the concept poeple have been writing on for yours--the mother-child relationship. Very good poem.
KH

[Krista]

This is really well written. I enjoyed it alot and can relate to it in strange way. Eventually all people lose the strength and will to live in my opinion but just don't know how to admit it. People can't stand on their own forever eventually and they need to get help when that time comes.

Again I say very well written!!

[ChristianM]

Wow. This is really beautiful. Structure is great, not that I know anything about structure. lol
Great message.
I might just give this to my mom for mother's day.
I will of course give you all the credit. =D

[Mai Aliza]

Superb! I love the structure of this poem. Excellent diction and imagery. Keep writing.

[A.Lee]

This one is really good. It has a sense of warmth to it. Well done.

[Steven Norton]

this could very well become the next "I'll Be There" song. you're doing great emily; and keep it up!

[Hi]

This one includes a load more things than the last poem that I read. You are improving a lot! Great Job!

[Jenny Nelson]

What a beautiful and wonderful tribute. It's very touching.