Steps of a Wanderer

Steps of a Wanderer

A Poem by emily

Glide along moonlit silk

Upon feet made of glass

Kiss the chill of twilight's breath

And taste the poor mans ilk

 

Savor calm of the Universe

The black silence of the stars

Sway in Earth’s cradled touch

The wanderer’s traverse

 

Bound from ledges of normalcy

Through the palm a coin shall burn

An ember of the suns array

Unbound by ties of solvency

 

Sway amongst oceanic tide

Feet unbound with heavy led

Not a penny in the pocket

No man from which to hide

 

So glide along moonlit silk

Upon feet made of glass

Kiss the chill of twilights breath

And taste the poor mans ilk


© 2011 emily



Author's Note

emily
I'm going to add in a few more stanzas in the middle, but this is the outline anyway.
Please share any thoughts/interpretations

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A very beautiful write
Feels like this subtle discovery
of the world and humanity
in a glimpse

pretty cool

Posted 1 Year Ago


Very good job. It was easy to read and has a nice flow to it. My only suggestion would be the last line of the 2nd stanza. It just kind of ends with what seems like a lacking syllable. Might I suggest the following:

Savor calm of the Universe
The black silence of the stars
Sway in Earth’s cradled touch
Where the wanderers traverse (Orig: The wanderer's traverse)

I know i'm changing "traverse" from a noun to a verb and possibly changing your intent completely. To me it makes more sense, but I'm not too bright :P

Posted 5 Years Ago


wow thsi is very good, so nicely expressed and written. Amazing write.

Posted 5 Years Ago


This was excellent. I loved how you used the same stanza first and last. But I afraid to say I have no idea what 'ilk' is. I thought maybe it was a typo of 'milk', but I really don't think that's right... :P

Posted 5 Years Ago


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good work it inspires me more and more to write better stuff
love it keep up the good work

Posted 5 Years Ago


wow!... excellent work Emily,
from the first beautiful lines to the last...I thought this was great.....I think i am really going to like your writing.
well done :)


Posted 5 Years Ago


God that is beautiful I cant think of a word to describe it .I simply lay my pen in reverence at your feet.

Posted 5 Years Ago


Amazing as always, reads fluidly and rolls on without need to process. I wonder how my mind would react to having such an imagination.

Posted 5 Years Ago


poetry that dances upon the iris of the mind's eye , words that stretch in silky tendrils from the dreamscape

Posted 5 Years Ago



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