Notebook

Notebook

A Poem by black.butterfly
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secret stories

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Notebook


Is innocence what you see?

I say it's nothing but a mere need.

You know nothing about me,

for I’m a notebook you can’t read.

 

You choose to believe that you know,

just like how I choose to ignore.

You suffer and yet you don’t let go.

I don’t see what all of this is for.

 

I can only write my own stories,

where this girl meets a boy.

They are saved by fairies.

It ends with a kiss of supreme joy.

 

You might be the real thing,

but you see, I only need you.

I can’t lie to be a girl given a ring.

In my story, you only exist as a foe.


© 2010 black.butterfly



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black.butterfly
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Interesting, good rhyme and flow with this one. I didn't really care for the second to last stanza. It sounds cheesy and I know it's meant to sound unrealistic... because it is... but I really just didn't like how far fetched it was. Only my opinion of it though. It's still a good poem regardless.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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I'd say I agree with Arra Frost in this this one, though a good writing.

Posted 7 Years Ago


this is awesome!!!
love it. short, sweet, direct and still somehow...leaves you in a daze.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Yet again I find myself enjoying your work. A very sweet and thought inducing piece!

Posted 7 Years Ago


Great start, pretty good all the way through accept the last part you may need to fine tune it a little otherwise nice work.

Posted 7 Years Ago


yep, i have to agree, really picturesque, vivid and beautiful poem. great

Posted 7 Years Ago


Ah! It is absolutely beautiful..very descriptive and intriguing.
Loved the theme of it a lot!

Posted 7 Years Ago


Another good piece bb. I liked this one a lot.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Interesting, good rhyme and flow with this one. I didn't really care for the second to last stanza. It sounds cheesy and I know it's meant to sound unrealistic... because it is... but I really just didn't like how far fetched it was. Only my opinion of it though. It's still a good poem regardless.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wow you are truely amazing at writing. It's so beautiful. My favortie part was
"I can only write my own stories

Where this girl meets a boy.

They are helped by sweet fairies

It ends with a kiss of extreme joy"

That was very cute. Well done:)


Posted 7 Years Ago


well thought out this one.......you have a nice way with words. I find myself agreeing with what your write quite often.

Posted 7 Years Ago



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Hey, You can call me ean, I'm 24 years old girl. A little mind taking in the world and putting it down into words; every thought, every wonder---are all just fascinating in their own way. My fa.. more..

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