Notebook

secret stories

Notebook

Is innocence what you see?

I say it's nothing but a mere need.

You know nothing about me,

for I’m a notebook you can’t read.

 

You choose to believe that you know,

just like how I choose to ignore.

You suffer and yet you don’t let go.

I don’t see what all of this is for.

 

I can only write my own stories,

where this girl meets a boy.

They are saved by fairies.

It ends with a kiss of supreme joy.

 

You might be the real thing,

but you see, I only need you.

I can’t lie to be a girl given a ring.

In my story, you only exist as a foe.

Author's Note

Sooo what do you think?

Reviews

[alesuriko]

Interesting, good rhyme and flow with this one. I didn't really care for the second to last stanza. It sounds cheesy and I know it's meant to sound unrealistic... because it is... but I really just didn't like how far fetched it was. Only my opinion of it though. It's still a good poem regardless.

[Tainted Devotion]

I like this poem very much. It's short and very sweet. Unique and special in it's own way, it is truly a very pretty poem. Well done.

[ettorney]

I like this poem. Very nice. A sweet story of longing.

[Justin Street]

I really like it. Although in my life i feel like I get the receiving end of this poem =/. My fav. stanza is the first. "Is innocence what you see? I say it is nothing but a mere need. You know nothing about me. For I’m a notebook you can’t read. really good write.

[Coyote Poetry]

Those hidden notebook can tell interesting stories. Woman are great mysteries. I have been marry 20 years and know very little of my wife real needs and desires. That is why woman keep a man attention and desire alert at all times. A excellent poem. I like the story in your words.
Coyote

[WriterMe]

haha I really like this. Poems with any form of rhyming scheme attract me.

You choose to believe that you know
Just like how I choose to ignore.
You suffer and yet you don’t let go
I don’t see what all of this is for.

Very good write =]

[bluessadmood]

is it innocence you see ,i am but a closed book you see..its just my needs
you believe what you like and i never care,you suffer and suffer and wont let go
yet i dont see ,i see me like in stories,i meet my boy ,the sweet fairies helped me
you could be for real ,but even you are all i need..i look for my ring ,the story said
and i believe you could be anything ,even a foe..someone i loved ,it just had to be
ohh i loved your story..fairy tales are lovely even if they send us to sleep..
lovely write

[ZaZa]

Wow. This is really good. There is a lot of emotion that is beautifully expressed throughout the poem. Really nice. :)

[Iota]

"You might be the real thing But you see, I only need you." I noticed you didn't write want you. Maybe not so innocent but truly human. Honest write from within and it is very good.

[siri]

Wow Ean. You are a great poet. this piece is beautiful, creative, and unique. It really fits the person I have got to know as poetry itself it was everything: flow and it was jopyeous to read but the creativity its like a big elephant walking accross a tight rope how the f**k did you do that brillient thanks for the share

[deeps]

I like this piece alot. Full of wonderful emotion poured out.
Wonderful and beuatifully expressed!