You are unfair

poem, break up

If only I had been smart,
I would have known you cheated from the start.
So, take a look at my heart
and see how you tore me apart.
Here our love will depart

To think you would care,
about the memories that we share.
You are so unfair,
caressing her hair
at that very same chair.
It is a fire I cannot bear.

Now, to my own delight,
I am glad you will not even fight.
I am happy being alone at night,
for you are not a noble knight.
Just get out of my sight.

Author's Note

Reviews are welcomed.
This is dedicated to every girl OR guy who have been broken by someone worthless. ^_^ It is not a personal experience, but feelings I have gathered from people who have gone through such a thing. So, I tried to express it as much as I can. Hope you like it.

Reviews

[Masaking]

Love it. You really did a great job!

[Talal Tashfeen]

This was quite nice, very straightforward and to the point! =D

[Philomela Titania Lanx]

I really liked your use of rhyme-scheme. I also think you captured the betrayal and disgust that goes along with being cheated on. Good job overall. :)

[JRB]

feel your sad

[Misty Blue Eyes]

i felt the emotion in this piece. very good

[chillz]

wow
wonderful piece
great use of emotions which wasn't your own
chillzxxx

[Alicka]

Wow! I don't review poems very often. But I must say that I enjoy the flow of your words into the next. Good job!

[Patches I'm not so new..]

I liked this, the angst come through loud and clear the fact that it isn't you which you give in the Arthor's Note isn't germaine to the poem the poem stands on it's own--- but is nice to know that you haven't personally felt the pangs of unrequited love.

[Ross Saunders]

Very nicely done. The only thing I had an issue with was the phrase "more smart". Maybe try "If only I had been smart". I don't know, just a suggestion. Still, very nicely done.

[Huggy Bear]

fantastic piece:)