As green as her eyes

Death and rebirth

Her pale face glares as a moon
drowning in a black ink ocean.
The stars in her green eyes are dying out soon,
quitely, still in motion.

Under the green grassfield likewise;
flows her hair---the color of the sand.
Her breath yields to the skies,
whereas the earth holds her hand.

Even in eternal slumber, she smiles;
as her lips are roses filling the world,
wide--extended for miles,
cherishing the gift of the lord.

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Author's Note

Reviews are welcomed.

Reviews

[Enid Blake]

Cool description of this character.

[Bhavya Kaushik]

The detailing in this piece is extra-ordinary. Loved the imagery here, which was used in almost every line. Very very well written :)

[Masaking]

nice job

[irishprincess]

wow that a amazing write i love it !!

[JRB]

ok nice write

[Philomela Titania Lanx]

This is such an amazing poem. I really loved it. I especially loved your use of phrasing and punctuation; it felt like I was reading Service!! Great job. :))

[Alex Zynder]

i really like the tone of this poem, its Fantastical yet honest and real to me, not too overly serence ( if there can be such a thing!)

[Angela]

Gently beautiful and engaging, the music adds a longing mournful feel. Nice addition.

[renyld]

you couldnt have ended this better the you had

[Richard McLin]

The music really did wonders on setting the tone of this piece which I found to be hypnotic. Not a lot of writers can put so much in such a small piece, but you made it feel alive, massive, and without equal. Great work.

-Richard