THE ATTEMPT

THE ATTEMPT

A Poem by cimmy wuv xxxooo
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What im going through at the moment

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I wonder what was going on in your head that night,
and how doing such a thing could ever feel right.
You didn't wake me, when these thoughts ran through your head,
Do you know how i felt to find you, and think you may be dead?

I guess that night nothing mattered, not even love,
Nothing seemed worth living for, when push came to shove.
The memories and good times, you wanted to leave behind,
Leaving yourself in that state, in the backyard, for me to find.

Bloody knife beside you, you laying still on the ground,
I called out to you in panic, but you didn't make a sound.
Until i went up closer, to see you shiver and shake,
I breathed in a sigh of relief, knowing you where awake.

You "were" confused and not yourself for a fair few days,
You "were" quiet and different, in quite a few ways.
Now that you are back to yourself, and getting well,
I don't think you realise how far you really fell.

What you did was allot more serious then what you think,
Your life could have been over, within a blink.
I still think it was selfish of you for sure,
to not want to be with the people who love you anymore.

Im pretty traumatised and going through "a lot"
You should never have put me in that spot.
I can't help but feel like i wasn't enough,
was it easy to leave me behind, when life got tough?

I can't understand it, and "there's" so many questions in my head,
so why? oh please babe, tell me why, would you want to wind up dead?


© 2017 cimmy wuv xxxooo



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It is really a sad spot to be in. You have very well brought your concern, anguish and agony one goes when one's close persons takes such a decision.
I wish the depressed ones realise that there are people who love and care for them in their weak moments.
Thanks for sharing this beautiful write Cimmy.

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

cimmy wuv xxxooo

6 Months Ago

Awwww thanks for the awesome review. Yes he has tonz of support and love, from allot of people.
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It is really a sad spot to be in. You have very well brought your concern, anguish and agony one goes when one's close persons takes such a decision.
I wish the depressed ones realise that there are people who love and care for them in their weak moments.
Thanks for sharing this beautiful write Cimmy.

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

cimmy wuv xxxooo

6 Months Ago

Awwww thanks for the awesome review. Yes he has tonz of support and love, from allot of people.
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I lost two brothers to suicide. Suicide is a quiet death. Some people just decide and do. Both my bothers left without note or reason for us to understand.
"Bloody knife beside you, you laying still on the ground,
I called out to you in panic, but you didn't make a sound.
Until i went up closer, to see you shiver and shake,
I breathed in a sigh of relief, knowing you where awake."
I like the meaning and the reason for the poem. We must pay attention to the people. We love. Thank you dear friend for sharing the powerful words.
Coyote

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

cimmy wuv xxxooo

6 Months Ago

Im extremely sorry that happened to u. Thats horrible :(
Thanks so much for the review coyot.. read more
Coyote Poetry

6 Months Ago

You are welcome.
This was a really heart touching poem for me to read. It's not easy when you go through a situation like that and to pen it down too. But I like how you still managed to rhyme to give it a good flow.
Well penned.

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

cimmy wuv xxxooo

6 Months Ago

Thanks so much. The more of an emotional experience the easier to write down.
Dr. YumnaKay

6 Months Ago

True..
You're welcome 😊😊
Oh wow.. that's one strong write with powerful words, as i was reading i actually saw what was going through these words.
You captured it and i saw it.
Well wrote.

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

cimmy wuv xxxooo

6 Months Ago

I see it all the time in flashbacks.... unwanted ones.
Thanks for the review :)
Joey Nizz

6 Months Ago

We all have those.. well some of us do.
Your welcome :)
Such a sad experience. I'm sorry you had to go through this. The poem was beautifully written.

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

cimmy wuv xxxooo

6 Months Ago

Thanks allot Paul. :)
This is very heart touching poem. I liked the way you gathered up yourself to write this poem.

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

cimmy wuv xxxooo

6 Months Ago

Thank you :)
Najam Us Saher

6 Months Ago

You're welcome. ☺
sorry for your experience but nine rhymes

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

cimmy wuv xxxooo

6 Months Ago

Thank you times 2 :)
writ rajat

6 Months Ago

i will rate it nine
cimmy wuv xxxooo

6 Months Ago

thankz :) :)
This is really sad, but on the other hand, it's so beautiful, as well. I'm only gonna say that be strong and there's gonna be sunshine. By the way, amazing write!

Posted 6 Months Ago


cimmy wuv xxxooo

6 Months Ago

ill continue to wait for the sunshine.
Thank you for your review :)
Anjali

6 Months Ago

Your welcome!
Heartbreaking and scary, but a powerful write none the less. The editor in me see a few spelling errors...You "were" confused... You "were" quiet..
going through "a lot".... and "there's" so many questions....
It doesn't take away from the meaning or vibe, just some things that stick out in my grammatical mind

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

cimmy wuv xxxooo

7 Months Ago

I wasn't sure sorry
LKBillips

7 Months Ago

yeah they look kind of cool. Makes those sentences more dramatic. :)
cimmy wuv xxxooo

7 Months Ago

haha ill keep em in then aeee :P
sad write and even more a sad situation,they are consumed with out knowing it..

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

cimmy wuv xxxooo

7 Months Ago

Thank you for your review wordman. Yes quite a hard situation, but he and I will both pull through.<.. read more
 wordman

7 Months Ago

yes you will,and you`re welcome

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