Phone Calls From The Dead

The phone began to ring
who's voice would it bring?
I picked up the phone
and heard a low moan
I felt a dead breath
the decay of death
then an operator came on
and said that man is dead and gone
a chill crept up my spine
I hung up in record time
then the phone rang again
I let it keep ringin'
then I heard a ghastly moan
and the force of the dead was known
it came through the answering machine
this felt like a nightmare dream
And the dead kept calling me
they wouldn't set me free
they haunted me until I died
now in the land of the dead I reside
now I haunt the livings telephones
when they answer my dead voice moans
you might get a call from the dead one day
and feel the haunting of dead decay.

Reviews

[Vanna Renee]

Hmm...
Use a bigger variety of vocab.
The idea of having the dead call the living is... mastered into a sickened technological reality.
I like it because there's an irony.
The average teenager won't let go of his/her phone for an hour or less from the time they wake up to the time they go to sleep.
Seems almost as though the dead is just trying to scare the minds of us all.
Twisted. Wicked.
I like it.

[Jon]

Wow never seen anyone write something like that before. Love the name ghost too, I go ghost hunting here in maine so its good to see someone one the same subject, nice write, creepy but creepily nice:D

[Sean M. Addams]

a cool and chilling piece .. very nice and creepy concept for a poem.. overall a very haunting and creative write ..nice job.

[Susie Q]

As a former telephone operater for many years I am glad I didn't get any calls from the dead. It sounds like a nightmare for sure. I hope my daughter reads this one since she wrote "THE ANSWERING MACHINE." lol

[chris-the-writer]

That was good. Interesting idea...dead people using phones to contact the living...very cool.

PROS: mostly good flow, great ryhiming "telephones...dead voice moans." Good flow for the story within it, too. You get the ulimate point across without dragging on.

CONS: some flow issues, nothing major and can be fixed with some brief word rearrangements.

thanks and keep it up

[HorrorMaster]

very scary, i love it.

[Star Wolf]

This brings on chills! Frightening horror poem. I hear on radio programs people saying they really do get phone calls from dead people, usually someone in the family that died. Still....scary..............scream!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[Black Cat Fever]

I shiver just thinking about the phone ringing and its the dead calling, perhaps someone I knew who has past or maybe not!! Excellent job on the chill factor on this write.

[lawrence bear]

a very spooky write, loved it, now I don't answer my calls that say, 'Unknown caller' thanks a heap, uh oh... its them again... I'll be right back!!

[Tina Kline]

This is very chilling. Just proves how scary telephones can be. Wonder what calling ID would say if one is receiving these calls or making them? Outstanding poem!