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motoring toward you ( love senryu)

motoring toward you ( love senryu)

A Poem by jacob erin-cilberto

motoring toward you (love senryu)

 

 

 

i am four wheel drive

trapped in a two wheel body

gunning the engine

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

7/29/15


© 2015 jacob erin-cilberto



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Mucho desire.
Sensational senryu!

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

2 Weeks Ago

thank you Frank....
j.
Those are the words i would love to say to my doctor.
With the footnote. Where do i go to get it done.

Posted 8 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

8 Months Ago

i hear you, Paul....
love that response...the doctor, our body's mechanic...

j.. read more
Sounds more like pent up lust Jacob!
Love the short form packed with metaphors.

Posted 8 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

8 Months Ago

thank you, John.
j.
Erin,
Motoring toward you (love senryu). What a happy lighthearted write! I just sat here and felt it's lighthearted message and had to just grin! Thanks for the happy little time in my day. "trapped in a two wheel body: You really gave us all a fantastic poem here! blessings Kathy

Posted 8 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

8 Months Ago

and thank you Kathy....appreciate your words.

j.
ahahahaha what a fine senryu for my morning ..bubbles up the chuckling from me belly :)
E.

Posted 10 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

10 Months Ago

thank you, E.

somehow this one got resurrected much to my surprise...thank you for yo.. read more
Ah, that feeling of spinning the wheels when you want to lay rubber, then stalling out when you dump the clutch. Nicely done, j.

Posted 10 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

10 Months Ago

yes, i have stalled out enough times...even though i do a clutch pretty well.

thanks,.. read more
The visions this creates, the sounds, and the emotions, it's a wonderful analogy as well as a fantastic metaphor! Short sweet and hard to beat...and best of all a perfect count!

Posted 10 Months Ago


Corset

10 Months Ago

they sure do :)
jacob erin-cilberto

10 Months Ago

oh that sounded bad...i meant they just seem to come naturally...i never force them...
Corset

10 Months Ago

I understood
Those words speaks like mountains!

i am four wheel drive
trapped in a two wheel body

Thanks, J.

Posted 10 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

10 Months Ago

thank you, tanmay----

j.
Love the choice of words and the scenery. So I became curious and made my way to the last page and your first poem and I wasn't disappointed yet I actually never thought I'd be, anyways. To be honest, I love your senryu style, I think you should write more of those...Warmest regards

Posted 1 Year Ago


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1 Year Ago

You took the words right out of my mouth and mind, or in this case, fingers ^^ again. I couldn't agr.. read more
jacob erin-cilberto

1 Year Ago

yes, we do! i have noticed that for awhile.
Closed

1 Year Ago

I know, we had talked about it before. It's great.
Haha this gave me a good laugh. it's a different feel to the poems i have usually read of yours, maybe it is because of it being a senryu? (i don't think so)
Well it was more than just me laughing, i liked the thought behind or maybe i am just viewing it differently ^^

Posted 1 Year Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Year Ago

thank you, Errenn....don't do too much form...but have fun with haiku and senryu...

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jacob erin-cilberto
jacob erin-cilberto

Carbondale, IL



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Originally from Bronx, NY, I live in Carbondale, Illinois...teach English at two community colleges and have been writing and publishing poetry since 1970. Friending works two ways. If we have had .. more..

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