Arrangement

Arrangement

 

 

 

i've been Garfunkeled into solo retreat 

the bridge teetering in a sky of why

 

friendships trestle over blue waters

hands no longer shake

but wave goodbye----

 

notes sprinkled with salty tremor

the voice stolen by subjugate age

 

and then i listen to my own record

feel mislabeled

A.S.C.A.P. ways entitle me to sing to 

the moribund wind of change

 

i am the lessened spice of life

engaged to an ending

 

that comes all too soon

like a shotgun wedding. 

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

8/1/15

Reviews

[Marvin Thomas Cox-Flynn..]

Jacob,

The earnest splendor of this piece lies in the fact that, regardless of the actual subject content of meaning's given situation, "Shotgun wedding's are seldom willing nor voluntary ...

Marve

[jacob erin-cilberto]

just loud with the sounds of the guns going off.
j.

[William Michael Reeves]

You are the prophet writing on the subway wall! And that is a great thought...mislabeled on your own record.

(Jeeeez Jacob!! 177 pages. It's gonna take me months.)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Bill,
j.

[Esteban Morfín]

One of my deepest fears in life is to grow old, and forget, and be forgotten. I don't want that moment to come, ever. I'm only 23 but I feel like I had 16 yesterday. Life is slipping through my fingers and I don't know how to stop it. It is an anxious feeling that will haunt me to the end of my days.
But hey, life's good anyway.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, life always seems to be slipping by so fast...I kind of remember 23...was there once.
thank you for sharing, Esteban,
j..

[Kathy Van Kurin]

Jacob erin-cilberto,
"Arrangement" I like how you use the finality of age reality's starkness in contrast with "Bridge over troubled water" in this poem. In "The bridge" when times get rough..friends just can't be found.." to "Like a bridge..I will lay me down." Your message is strong in relation to the here and now; "bridge teetering..sky of why..hands no longer shake but wave goodbye.." The reality of this poem really gave me pause as I am no longer back in the Bridge over era myself. Going strong and willing to realize that humbleness in life reality is very good. I had the lyrics up as well and was comparing. Very fun experience. Blessings...............Kathy

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you so much for your kind words, Kathy...
j.

[Kathy Van Kurin]

Heh Jacob, I hope you are doing good and find that the refreshing of spring is starting to become real I enjoyed your poem very much. Kathy

[Einstein Noodle]

ending couplets are striking and powerful for me .. i feel sad with broken dreams, haunted by loss and wanting ... unfulfilled needs are not cherished .. and when it gets to late to tie hope to them .. we are undone ... i think a little Dillon is in these lines:
"A.S.C.A.P. ways entitle me to sing to
the moribund wind of change" ... but i'm not sure that he has turned the corner ;)
what a fine poem Jacob! leaves me sitting here drained ...
E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review...E.
sorry it drained you, though.

j.

[Einstein Noodle]

:) .... not to worry .. lots of good strong coffee in the larder ... and a dog that bends steel in her bare teeth

[jeannemarie coulter]

WONDERFUL TRIP THROUGH MEMORIES TO THE FUTURE COMING...VERY WELL PENNED

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, jeannemarie.

j.

[B]

I have come to believe the more one feels like that
The more you have become you

And then its very much like a fine wine
Only few can learn of its value

So maybe engaged to a wiser phase of life
with much meaning and depth

I love it

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Nisreenaa.

j.

[Ken Simm.]

I've yet to meet anyone where that song does not mean something significant in their lives. Reading your replies you were lucky. But that takes nothing away from this writing. It takes someone special to make even more out of the soundtrack of all our lives.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Ken---i appreciate them much as i so respect your work and the way you weave such pictures with your poetry.

[....................]

Love the play on the title and really enjoyed this entire piece, Jacob...I am a Simon and Garfunkel fan and love your reference to them and their music... but more so, I love the description of that ending relationship, whether it is with life, a business partner or a lover... also enjoyed your use of trestle as a verb...but, after the tears have dried let's hope we find something new...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

two things started me writing poetry...my best friend in college, Jane, who was a wonderful poet, and listening to Simon and Garfunkel---i was lucky enough to see them here at SIU in November of '69---just before they released the Bridge album...and they sang several songs from it...including the first time garfunkel sang bridge live...he got a five minute standing ovation, for a song nobody had ever heard...yes, simon and his poetry, artie and that voice.
i do tend to reference them often..thank you for your words FT...

j.

[....................]

That's awesome, Jacob...I have DVDs and CDs of their music but envy you that you got to see them live... i am thankful for YpuTube...appreciate the story and you are welcome, my friend

[paul sal.....]

Like a bridge over troubled water.........

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, like that...thank you, paul.

j.