pasteurized

pasteurized 

 

 

stalled sentiments

stanchioned thoughts of love

not fed, just trapped

in suspension

 

milked heart for all its worth

now in dry pasture scheming

 

how to find the door to her barn

once again,

so she'll notice and not just count

me 

one of the herd

she's already sold for beef.

 

 

erin-cilberto

8/4/15

Reviews

[Ananke]

I adore this. There is a lot of "meat" to this short poem..."One of the herd she's already sold for beef"...It made me think of the adage "why buy the cow when he can get the milk for free". To me, it reflects a neat reversal of some common gender roles and it was refreshing to see it from the male/ beef cattle perspective.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Ananke...

j.

[Marvin Thomas Cox-Flynn..]

If my name were Robin, I would be shouting, "Holy S**t, Batman!

This piece is filled to the gills with done been done wrong in a long line of wrong doings ...

Marve

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Robin, uh, I mean Marve.
j.

[Kathy Van Kurin]

Jacob erin-cilberto,
"pasteurized"
When we love it is our living essence which is gambled.
As this poem lends itself the idea of love being trapped and not fed.
A conquest of a human being is a sad thing and you have done an amazing job of inferring this without actually saying it.
YOu have it down so perfect! This is an art form and not easily gained.
Blessings,
Kathy

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your incredibly kind review, Kathy.
j.

[Kathy Van Kurin]

It's just nice to read and enjoy poetry and your stuff is just great!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

The first stanza made me think of a foetus suspended in a jar of formaldehyde; trapped there inert. Love and its fickleness and the way we can feel discarded and written off and yet we try. The king of metaphor at his best Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

love your reply...metaphorical and insightful...thank you, John.
j.

[Jimmy Yetts]

Was aroused by "the door to her barn."
(Maybe it was all those "Farmer's Daughter" jokes I heard when I was a kid.)
In any event, "Pasteurized" offers smart metaphors and rather bitter conclusions.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Jimmy...

j.

[andrew mitchell]

To get her attention again on what is now waning for through her eyes your just the same as the rest of them. Not a Standout! That's how I read it lol Nicely written Jacob

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, andrew....

j.

[Cat]

Interesting topic, very unique and well executed.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Cat.
j.

[rubie]

how clever this one is!!!

so many ways to take this one....

being put out to pasture because you have outlived your usefulness....sad

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, rubie.

j.

[h d e rushin]

I thought about pasteurization the other day. How people were sickened by drinking
un-pasteurized milk in the UP, and how that process, which is so necessary now, didn't have
much use at all in the forties or fifties. My mother tells me the story of how she would
drink milk just minutes removed the milk-cows utter. But just as everything else changes,
so do our love processes; so does the she process of sorting out lovers I suspect.

your analogies are always so spot on my friend....

dana

[jacob erin-cilberto]

we used to drink right from the cows, when we were up in Vermont...and it was fine...tasted great.read morewe used to drink right from the cows, when we were up in Vermont...and it was fine...tasted great.
thanks for bringing me back there, and for your kind review.

j.

[Alessander]

wow. Great way of working with the metaphor. I had to google "Stanchioed" and it was worth it. Definitely fits the theme.

It's very concrete, and the whole poem makes me feel very confined and restless, perhaps like a bull/cow are supposed to be while caged.

The ending is also fantastic. Way to end it. It's somewhat wry but alludes to the darker side of love without being heavyhanded.

Good stuff, Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Alessander.

j.

[Miss Sharon]

Reading your poetry is like a breath of fresh air to me Jacob. Bravissimo. ~Sharon

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for those kind words, Sharon.

j.

[Miss Sharon]

You are welcome sir! ~SP