Creation's Circumstance

Creation's Circumstance

 

 

 

i met your skin last night

an evolution of chemicals

ignited my heart into fallible explosion

 

and i thought my walls were so perfectly built

a fortress of frozen brick,

but one touch of your mortared invitation

 

my resistance became a flawed effigy

of evasion,

and one body became another became one

 

violent delights

a skyscraper of love

infinitely reaching towards a delighted moon.

 

 

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

8/17/15

Reviews

[Kathy Van Kurin]

'Creation's Circumstance'
Jacob,
Well this was quite fun to read. You used emotion backed by images of creation within a relational delight. How can we find the right words but we do. Life and it's relationships really do make our worlds whole. Whether it is within the confines of marriage, friendship or whatever it is something which has to be built, treasured. This poem showed that fulfillment and it is just something to be thankful for. To be in a place where we can simply smile and soak in the joy.
Thanks for a super fun poem.
Kathy

[jacob erin-cilberto]

my my, Kathy,
thanks so much for bringing this one back from the dead, and for your kind and insightful words,
j.

[Kay]

It's incredibly charming when a writer can unravel their affection for someone into fine strings of adoration, such as an appreciation of details like the 'evolution of chemicals'. Nicely done.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Kay,
j.

[Jimmy Yetts]

Mushy stuff, grown-up mushy stuff.
My many years of viewing early cowboy movies incline me more to tonguelessly kiss my horse and ride off into a black-and-white sunset.
Inwardly, guess I'm still under twelve.
Gotta admit, though, this piece generated some fascinating images--and not a little heat!
New take on: "To the moon, Alice!"

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Okay Ralph Kramden..."bang, zoom"
thank you for your kind words and the smile.
j.

[Cassie]

ahhaaa.....jacob, dont you think this should have been mature rated (on a light note) I enjoyed. your words seem to find you so easily

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Cassie. :))))

[Pryde Foltz]

A passionate work in metaphor. Excellent.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Pryde.

j.

[~]

Side by side, building an empire of happiness, and fireworks around that skyscraper of ecstasy.
A bit brighter than your usual gloom, yet with your signature of vivid figurative language.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

am I really that gloomy? well, not in real life...thank you for your words, moonskittles.
read moream I really that gloomy? well, not in real life...thank you for your words, moonskittles.

j.

[~]

:) I cannot imagine you otherwise in real life :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I have fun---even in the bad times, nothing like a sense of humor to carry us through.
that is probably why even my darkest writes have humor in them...can't help it.

[~]

that is the wisest thing to do!!! :)

[marcus]

ahh, the magic of creation, beautiful!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, marcus.

j.

[Cherry Pepperweb]

Very nice. :)
Love it.
I want some of what they're having!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, and the smile.

j.

[Cherry Pepperweb]

My pleasure. :)

[jeannemarie coulter]

beautiful word tapestry experience...wowzer all the way

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, jeannemarie.
j.