a realtor's misguided dream

a realtor's misguided dream

 

 

entitlement,

your love was an inseparable notion

 

a will in the spine of my contentment

a consignment of property

 

a house of heart

razed in ruinous potion

 

the liquid tears in tactful technique

an old "for sale" sign with some letters faded

 

on the market for too long

the value comes down eventually

 

entitlement,

of settlement

and sometimes contentment

 

found in moving on.

 

 

erin-cilberto

9/12/15

Reviews

[NeiL ArandA]

Another great usage of analogy Jacob. A foreclosed love affair perhaps. A house waiting for a buyer or love birds to rebuild their nest. Perhaps due to neglect and bitterness and discontentment. The love devalued. I wonder Jacob if it still be renovated. To give it a new face lift and perhaps rekindle the fire and give this house a new curb appeal. You always have a way of setting your canvas and using it as a background to pen your thoughts and subject or muse. Always fascinated with your skill and talent.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thanks again for your most insightful response, Neil.

j.

[Terpsichore]

A house they say, 'aint necessarily a home; and how true that is.

Masterful write. T

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, T.
j.

[Nico Reznick]

This made me think of cycles of ownership and how they work both ways, the way possessions and estates can come to own their owners.

Appealingly atmospheric.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Nico...yes that analogy is definitely there.

j.

[JayceeC]

This is going too get a WOW from me. This is a metaphor stand I wish I'd thought of first. Love sometimes fails under the weight of expectations. It's a painful process to putt a heart back on the market, but hopefully it's much wider this time.
Settling always sounds like a raw deal, but it's not always. One of my favorite things about this poem is that it ends on a note of contentment. Society makes it sound bad, but there is much happiness to be found there. A little.adding seems to make for wiser choices next time.x Jan

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Jaycee...

j.

[Alfred Kukitz]

I sense a bitterness in the memory of the poem. The fortune is moving on and a chance to start anew.

Regards,
Al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Al.

j.

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the realtor often wants to get rid of a property as quickly as possible to ensure maximum profit...unfortunately, some properties are in a state of dilapidation and stays on the market far too long...eventually the realtor has to let it go for next to nothing in order to move on to the next property...such as it is with relationships...this is a great metaphorical write, my friend

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you are very kind in your reviews, FT.

thank you for your words.

j.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

This reminds me of an old piece I wrote so long ago entitled Antique Stores...where I pointed out that one woman's trash is another woman's treasure; on old odd piece of junk to one person is a thing of great value to another and it must be so or else antique stores everywhere would be out of business. (smile) I always enjoy reading your musings and metaphors my friend. Have a pleasant Sunday. Bless.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for sharing...and for your kind words on my poem, Fabian.

j.

[rubie]

yes, "contentment found in moving on"...great finish to this piece.

things could have been worse, i suppose.

at least you weren't foreclosed. or, were you....?

[jacob erin-cilberto]

good question, rubie.

thank you,

j.