walking funny

walking funny

there's a blister on my heart

no ointment can freeze it enough

to delete,

yet i repeat the process

the salve of words

and it remains

indelible

perhaps if i squeeze the components

you'll drain out of my memory

but that small scar

will still be a poem

an aftereffect of the intrusion

even if only

a senryu of retention.

erin-cilberto

9/12/15

Reviews

[Kelly Scheppers]

The pain will always be indelible...that's the food for thought we feed upon as writer's.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Kelly.

j.

[1VJ]

Write, repeat, poetry tends to be the one salve that's effective. A senryu of retention, brilliant!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your really kind words, Paloma.

j.

[rubie]

a good one for me to read today.

i needed to be reminded that memories will always be mine to keep, and no one can take them away from me.

lovely piece.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, rubie.

j.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Memories of love will never be erased- both the happy and sad. As long as you have those memories, you will have the poems to write - both happy and sad.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Dhaye...

j.

[~]

We design a process to keep us moving forward, yet tracing those etched lines across our hearts made by those loves that are unforgettable.

Great lines resonating with us all who write to salve the soul.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, moonskittles.
j.

[Pryde Foltz]

For some reason I am reminded of Thorn in my Side by the Eurythmics … we are told to go out there and find our soul mates but we are never told they might offer more angst than euphoria. Love this.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Pryde.
j.

[Alfred Kukitz]

A poet filled with the gift of writing and equally filled with the remorses of love. You must be so right hemispheric dominant you have trouble with the logics of life. Great write!

regards,
al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Al.

j.

[Bright Ocean Star]

again, ending with a bang! "even if only a senryu of retention'. You posit words like a painter chooses hues and colors. Excellent!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Anne.
j.

[....................]

no matter what we do, we can never fully rid ourselves of those lingering memories... some loves are buried too deep...this is such a brilliant write, Jacob...i love the the last two stanzas...wish they had come from my pen:)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, FT.

j.