no milk today

no milk today

 

 

 

roast chocolate blues

dark scent in Paris cafe

overturned coffee

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

11/14/15

Reviews

[andrew mitchell]

I could smell the gun powder in this write J. Nice work as always so polished and refined.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, andrew...

j.

[rubie]

wow....

just wow.

and the title is perfect.

the precise brevity of your piece parallels the brevity of time in which the massacre happened....

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, rubie.

j.

[Cryingkate]

Holding my tongue! Other then Thanking you for the statement of a thousand lines and thoughts all wrapped neatly into a little bar.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Connie.

j.

[Alisa Js]

This one depicts how life can change suddenly, in a moment....another reminder to appreciate each and every moment, as there are no guarantees for tomorrow.

Well done, you.

Alisa💫

[Ruth]

Wow...stole my breath, such a concise piece offers much...the imagery, places, sensations, thoughts that cascade onto each other...beautiful Jacob! :)

[Miss Sharon]

Beautifully written and so very poignant Jacob. Overturned coffee...and shattered lives. ~Sharon

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Sharon.

j.

[Beccy]

I often wonder, when will it all end; but wonder more if it ever will.


Beccy.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

me too...thank you, Beccy...
j.

[Jimmy Yetts]

A moment perceptively and artistically captured.
It is such typically "small things" we so often notice during or after great tragedy.
Great almost haiku!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Jimmy....yes, not meant as haiku...it's senryu...

i appreciate your review.

j.

[Jimmy Yetts]

Understood, Jacob, was more referring to the eight syllables in the second line.
Obviously, I love the piece.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

wow, yes, thanks...it is almost a senryu---i don't know how the heck i was counting syllables....getting senile...

guess i will leave it as an almost...

thank you, Jimmy.

j.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i really appreciate you catching that...i thought about taking out the "in" but it changed the meaning too much...so i am stuck with an "almost"---

[Jimmy Yetts]

Yes, I stand corrected. an almost-senryu.
Gorgeous by any other name.

[Jimmy Yetts]

Just a quick thought. You could have taken out the article "a."

[jacob erin-cilberto]

will do...........

[Alfred Kukitz]

Great write!

al............................

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Al.

j.

[Zugzwang]

That really brings it home, Jacob. So forlorn. Thanks for this.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Zeitnot...

I am so saddened by the state of the world...all the hate...violence.

[Zugzwang]

So true, I just read a news report that terrorism is on the rise. I guess we ought to be grateful that we largely insulated from it in the west. In other parts of the world its much more common...perhaps almost routine. So it's a big shock when it happens here. I am reminded of the poem and documentary 'out of the blue', about 9/11. I still remember where I was that day. So sad.